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EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

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0 posted 2003-11-19 10:17 AM

Hearken not Unto the Voice

Hearken not unto the voice that mutters in the night,
Only the departed can perceive Death's hoary grumble,
Stalwartly in the nightfall observe thy vigils light.

Speak not above a whisper the Reaper's writ of right,
Let not thy courage chaps in these wee hours crumble,
Hearken not unto the voice that mutters in the night.

The reaping of human souls is the gardener's delight,
Verily I say his billhook harvests those who stumble,
Stalwartly in the nightfall observe thy vigils light.

Stand immutable gentlemen and hold thy heads upright,
Because none hath ever claimed that Death was humble,
Hearken not unto the voice that mutters in the night.

With discriminating eyes take in the panoramic sight,
Yet consider not the rolling thunder's distant rumble,
Stalwartly in the nightfall observe thy vigils light.

Pixies are playing a funeral hymn in a meadow bright,
The pitch of the lyre, to thine ears; seems to fumble.
Hearken not unto the voice that mutters in the night,
Stalwartly in the nightfall observe thy vigils light.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2003-11-19 10:29 AM

Stand immutable gentlemen and hold thy heads upright,
Because none hath ever claimed that Death was humble,

love these lines..and found the whole piece to be an interesting read and use of language.. well done sir.. well done

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2003-11-19 10:37 AM

With discriminating eyes take in the panoramic sight,
Yet consider not the rolling thunder's distant rumble,
Stalwartly in the nightfall observe thy vigils light.

~*~

You seem to do these with little effort, giving the effect that anyone can...but I know, that is just not so. It takes talent.

Thank you, Sir.

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

3 posted 2003-11-20 03:39 AM

Hi Cpat...thank-you so very much for the kind words. One day I will be as good as you.

Hi Sunshine. I am glad you enjoyed this. Yes the Villanelle is not an easy poetry form to write and the reason is not so much the meter, the repetition, or the rhyme. It is in building the impact of the repeated message high enough and clear enough (woven into all the supporting lines) not to be drowned by this poem's inherently complicated "form," but rather, enchancing and completing the form. Most attempted villanelles fail to do that well. It is the part than cannot copied, only created. This is the only Villanelle I have ever written...but I am considering doing another because I like the way this one turned out.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

froggy
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since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

4 posted 2003-11-20 09:23 PM

Hey Shakespeare,
You must teach me this form sometime.
Love it

:-)

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

5 posted 2003-11-20 09:42 PM

I love shapespearean poetry, especially I like reading yours, Shakespeare just happens to be my favorite poet and your writing reflects his soul...he speaks through you today...

~ARH

True poets don't write with the ink of quill or pen, but with the ink of their heart~

[This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (11-20-2003 09:44 PM).]

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

6 posted 2003-11-20 10:03 PM

indeed talent....you write well sir...

lauren~

I had a dream last night
you came to me on silver wings of light
I flew away with you in painted sky
Was it real
Is it what you see,touch or feel

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2003-11-20 10:15 PM

You have written a very fine villanelle! ~ and considering that is your very first one makes it all the more impressive!

I enjoy this form very much. I find the process of writing one, much like following a recipe ~ and I do not like following recipes! ~ but the outcome is most often rewarding and sweet!

EA

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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8 posted 2003-11-21 04:32 AM

very impressive indeed! I could never even attempt.

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