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Finding God |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279
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Finding God Poet: In the hyaline waters I doth view a paradox. Echo: A pair a docks! Poet: I ask myself what ode may climb yon rampart. Echo: Ramp art! Poet: Whereabouts, of our Savior, might I inquire? Echo: In choir! Poet: God hath attuned these strings upon my lyre. Echo: Liar! Poet: Satan doth entice me frequently I do attest. Echo: A test! Poet: My reverent belief he'd beseech to overhear. Echo: Over here! Poet: 'Tis truly only the damned who would follow. Echo: Fall low! Poet: I found our Lord upon this branch of poetry. Echo: Poet tree! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling).. my first response was to say..I too find god humurous.. but then I realize that may not at all be your point. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
EvocativeVerse2 Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Excellent! Eric |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh my...Kevin, this is so clever! How I enjoyed this! It's a keeper for my library! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I enjoyed your play on words, knowing that you weren't playing at all...  |
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duncan idaho Member
since 2003-11-14
Posts 70dune |
ingeniously stupid |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hi all. Cpat always a pleasure when you visit my work. Seymour...thanks for stopping in. I really appreciate it when you come for a visit. Ericc thank-you. Glad you liked this piece of Echo Verse. Passing Shadows it makes my day when you stop by. Sunshine...always and truly a pleasure. Duncan Idaho - Ingeniusly stupid? (Laughing out loud.) I take it you do not know the Echo Verse form. I don't mind constructive critiques...heck I don't even mind brutal honesty but I do expect a person to be able to give a honest critique...and not just words without any backing to them. Let us educate you shall we? Echo Verse A poem in which the last syllable or two of a main line is repeated, perhaps with different spelling or meaning, as if an echo; usually this echo will be indented to a point under or beyond the syllable it mimics and will function as an independent line of one or two syllables. Sometimes the word echo will precede the repetition, like to identify the speaker in a play. Echo Verse can often serve an ironic purpose, the meaning of the echo conflicting with what the original sound means example ‘know’ echoed by ‘no’. On the other hand an echo poem can be used simply as another kind of rhyme. George Herbert (1593-1633) was truly a man who popularized the form. Mayhap you should check out his work. Thank-you all for reading my little attempt to try my hand at something different. I really appreciate the time you all took to respond. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Very different indeed my friend. I love it though. :-) |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
....saved!!! This tickled my bone of funny, but in a distinctively profound manner!  Veeeery inteeeeeeresting! lol  EA |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
well done, this looks like a hard form to learn, not that its complicated, just difficult. ya made me think... always good  Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
EV, Your work always intrigues me. Thanks for sharing it and the history and makings of the echo poem. It was very interesting to read both the echo and the poet by themself, as well. Even some of echo made sense independent from the poet. Does that make sense? Oh, well...I tried. Sadelite [This message has been edited by Sadelite (11-21-2003 07:13 AM).] |
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Hockeychick19 Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 430Massachusetts, USA |
Kevin this is funny. Excellent work my friend... I love it. ~Kelly~ Life is a gift so live it to the fullest! |
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