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Far Away Enough to Send (Almost)
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Far Away Enough to Send (Almost) |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Far Away Enough to Send (Almost) Ever think back to the seventies? Once or twice I have, envisioning this collage of moods and memories. Time has finally distanced my inabilities to share. I thought you might enjoy this; wanted you to know all those years I cared. Car washes and hayrides, piano keys and genealogies. You whittled a green twig in shape of S, then handed it to me for inspection. I placed it upon your chest. Superman you were to me. Strong, but humble. Yes. In your frig there’d always be a homemade apple pie, jelly made from collected mint, real butter, fresh milk, and cheese. Remember his eggplant ptarmigan cooked especially for you and me and pig roasts, with Buttons, you, and Steve? I have collages of memories of cookie baking and happy making. I guess I always will. My fondest are your impish green hide-and-seeking eyes, peeking from the cellar to catch me in surprise. Could we ever forget climbing the tall blue silos to steal kisses against the sky? Each time you were late, tired, and just could not gener- ate enough energy to come see me, it killed my soul a little more until I felt almost soulless, completely poor. I had to break off or become completely broken. Even so, for years I suffered a dislocated soul. Had I been more patient, I wonder what would have been. But that was that and this is now. FYI, I’m finally happy, and you’re far away as time goes. [This message has been edited by Sadelite (11-18-2003 09:18 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I have collages of memories of cookie baking and happy making. I guess I always will. My fondest are of your impish green hide and seeking eyes, peeking-- from the cellar to catch me in surprise. Could we ever forget climbing the tall blue silos to steal kisses against the sky?" Much enjoyed you sharing your happy memories with us! Hugs~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This is so true.... and I like the way you handled it better than the way I did at just the same time. Some excellent writing here, the imagery and movement couldn't be better. Here's mine.... /pip/Forum82/HTML/003266.html This one goes to my library, and I'll be looking for more of your work! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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carol7565 New Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 1 |
Sounds like your heart still beats for your first true love. Thank you for sharing... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well done... very good sense of movement and of images.. woven into a story that holds the reader well, making them feel the memories as well as see them.. very nice work... I enjoyed! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sadelite, A nicely done write, enjoyed the read. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Even so, for years I suffered a dislocated soul. Had I been more patient, I wonder what would have been. But that was that and this is now. FYI, I’m finally happy, and you’re far away as time goes. ~*~ I could have copied the whole of this and that would not have been enough to say thank you for your sharing. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Bravo! This is marvelous! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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ranidae_poet Member
since 2003-11-05
Posts 66Texas,USA |
This was a truly inventive write. For a moment I was a 70's child.  thank you for sharing these word with me and making me feel another era. There are only three beings worth of respect; the priest, the solider and the poet; To know, To Kill and to create. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I remember the 70s, yet I was born in 69 the 80s were a blur |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
passing shadows, I always felt you were very astute, AND now I find you were precocious at the very early age of one! (The 80s were a blur to me, too --and come to think of it, the 90's, too! Sadie |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Enchantress, I glad you enjoyed the peace. They were good times...But, Now is good, too. Sadie Ratleader, In your library? I feel honored! Thank you for your kindness. Sadie |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Carol, Sounds like my heart still beats for my first true love? Hm. That's debeatable. Sadie Capt, I couldn't believe ya stopped at my post and left your tracks! I really appreciate your kind comments. Poetry is work for me at this point, but this peace seemed to flow on its own. Thanks again for stopping by... Sadie |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Seymour, Again, I thank you for your warm comments. I'm always flattered when you stop by and lend them. Sadie Sunshine, You are wonderful! Your response made me feel really good about this one. I'm glad you liked it. See you around again sometime. Sadie |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Evocative, It's good to meet again. I'm glad you liked this one. It had a lot of meaning to me. Stop in again sometime. Sadie Rani, I'm glad this put you in the seventies. Although it took place in the seventies, homemade butter, collected mint, etc. had pretty well died down. The seventies were more long hair, reflection, and adventure, at least in my eyes. The setting of the poem took place on a family farm of long tradition. At the time it took place, most of the family farms in this area and many other areas, had folded because new generations couldn't pay their increased property taxes (increased by raised land values due to suburbs extending toward the country. Also, farmers couldn't make a living off the farm. Sure, meat prices were high, but the farmer himself saw little of the money.) Just had to add a little more history-hope you didn't mind... Sadie [This message has been edited by Sadelite (11-21-2003 06:59 AM).] |
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