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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-09-21 01:03 PM

The tracks fill with miles,
stretching the dwindling sunlight
and taking the sliver of moon
for a ride tonight.

Across the water,
the final bursts of birds,
cast the last moments of daylight,
richocheting off the flatfaced river
where all roads
lead to the lady of the harbor.

Life moves
between train stops,
sacred and absurdly meaningless,
all in the same breath.

It's all just a coin toss,
as tracks wind
along golf coursed gated condos,
and rusted rails slice asphalts of broken glass,
beneath billboards seducing with $200 sneakers,
over streets where hope hangs in hoops,
of golden tickets out.

There is addiction everywhere,
dysfunction lives in a common thread,
weaving commuters together between the stations,
abridged and condensed life in window slices,
brought together by sinking suns and marquise moons,
in an hour on the Hudson.

I try in vain
to clean the shelves of mind clutter,
but find no resolution,

instead sip slowly the translike tonic
of the river of valium,

sitting pretty,
at a windowseat,
for the moment
sedated.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (09-21-2003 09:37 PM).]

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

1 posted 2003-09-21 01:14 PM

Michele,
makes one wonder if clarity is a gift
or a burden,

Lifes moves,
between train stops,
sacred and absurdly meaningless
all in the same breath.

yes in the same second even . .
beautiful writing
xxoo

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

2 posted 2003-09-21 02:15 PM

Sometimes its best to silently ride, as passenger, very still and watch. Enjoyed

"Nils Desperandum" Wells Family Motto

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2003-09-21 03:20 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Though I believe it is OK to see such insanity and deep emotions from the inside looking out, I too believe it is best sometimes to lay back and try not to draw too much attention to it all before one's self feels queasy too! (sigh) You really bring out deep emotion here, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

4 posted 2003-09-21 03:24 PM

Twentytwenty twenty
four hours to go
I wanna be sedated
Nothin' to do and
no where to go
I wanna be sedated

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2003-09-21 03:25 PM

So expertly written.

Susan

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

6 posted 2003-09-21 05:47 PM

terrifically penned,,,

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

7 posted 2003-09-21 07:01 PM

Life moves
between train stops

Love this line! Good Job and better write. Kudos

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2003-09-21 09:35 PM

It's all just a coin toss~
Yer such a cool babe!

There is definitely something missing when the world is passing us by, and worse, when the train doesn't stop here.

Loved this girlielocks~

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2003-09-22 12:20 PM

thanks kids for stopping in

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

10 posted 2003-09-22 12:41 PM

Excellently penned.

Crystal

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

11 posted 2003-09-22 01:09 PM

This is excellent m.

Has that hypnotic rhythmic quality--comforting somehow.

(and it did occur to me that I could follow this up with Medicated on the Mississippi--but I'm sort of retired now--sheesh and winks)

I loved this, and hope to see more in this style from you.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

12 posted 2003-09-22 01:13 PM

Excellent write Michele...
Enjoyed the read.
~Hugs~

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

13 posted 2003-09-22 01:16 PM

I know this feeling. It is like I'm in a dream state observing life from a distance, and not being a part of it.

EA

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