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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Alone alone it staggers me to find out you are an empty shell something so beautiful yet ugly and empty inside living tightly turmoiled in a fragile bubbled sphere a hot fire of self centeredness heat that is fueled by fear circling yourself around a stone you repetitiously speak laced words in which to intricately describe yourself but they only scream echoing back nothingness and in doing this act who are you trying to convince – you or me magic begs to change stone alchemized to a pumping sigh but no one can touch you feathered hands find themselves withdrawn singed and empty never allowed to cross and penetrate the circumference of brim blazing of just your needs knowing no guilt in selfishness showing no regard of having others feel lonely in your company and in the hierarchy-ed triangle of life and love there is perfect selection and you shall remain alone |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
... with these premises, yes, he may remain alone! Great write! Love, Margherita |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
a hot fire of self centeredness heat that is fueled by fear circling yourself around a stone you repetitiously speak laced words in which to intricately describe yourself but they only scream echoing back nothingness and in doing this act who are you trying to convince – you or me ah..so you now know how I feel about what I write..  well done Helen, concise, strong, good imagery and scathing.... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awesome Helen. So full of deep feelings! I had to stop and read it again. hugs, Chris Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Such loss in this...but that's not what this poem is about. The theme is strength, and I applaud you for that, even if it's bought through pain. Even a heart of stone can break, and it may be that you just put some well-deserved cracks in one. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OneSlick~ I see such unbridled strength pouring forth in this penning~ YOURS ! This is just powerfully awesome my dear lady~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 you know I love this |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"magic begs to change stone alchemized to a pumping sigh but no one can touch you" OK, but what is to be done when none survive touch? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic write Helen.... Love this! Hugs~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Loved the powerful imagery you espouse. Especially liked "living tightly turmoiled in a fragile bubbled sphere" Powerful write. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
H - this is wonderful..when are we going to duet?? E-mail me. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
soon ok meg? i am working on some prose things right now but when i finish we will i promise...i will be posting 1 soon...h...ps smooch |
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