Belief - Wranx's Masquerade Challenge

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EvocativeVerse2
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0 posted 2003-11-17 02:57 AM

I constantly hunger
for life
to endure
To but kiss your lips once
softly, with ache...
At times, I suspect reason
for fortune has never been my consort
Yet in this here and now
I'd clasp tightly to the sweetness of you

the reverie

Still I can not condemn
this inherent hurt
which speaks to my heart so eloquently
I sincerely dispute
my rationality
not because I misdoubt us,
or scorn "commitment"
More readily inasmuch as I know
that I just do not give credence to
happily ever-after
My deepest appoligies to my poor victim in this little challenge. I really do admire their work...this is just a form of poetry I can not write well. That is why I stick with metered verses. (Wink!)

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-11-17 04:38 AM

*shrugging* got me

but it's a good write

littlewing
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2 posted 2003-11-17 04:43 AM

sounds like . . . ok it sounds like two people to me
*smile*

My God what a beautiful write this is Kevin

[This message has been edited by littlewing (11-17-2003 04:46 AM).]

EvocativeVerse2
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3 posted 2003-11-17 09:09 AM

Hi passing shadows. Thank-you for reading this ill attempt. I had to try the challenge...I should have stuck with something a little closer to my own style.

Hi littlewing. Sounds like 2 people? (Snicker!) If I say it is a SHE does it narrow it down? Thank-you for reading my little poem...bad as it was.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-11-17 09:15 AM

No No Kevin . . this is absolutely beautiful , especially if you do not typically write this way
*smiling*
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (11-17-2003 06:50 PM).]

Sunshine

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5 posted 2003-11-17 09:16 AM

AHA. It's a s/he.
You did a good job.
Do it more often.
Practice...makes poets.

wranx
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6 posted 2003-11-17 12:59 PM

Again, whether or not you have written this poet well is secondary to the honor bestowed. (And the stepping from ones' skin into that of another)

The write? It's a beauty!
Your costume? Hmmmm, I see an "M"

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

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7 posted 2003-11-17 01:05 PM

hmmmmmmmm...

I am having a hard time with this game..

but this is a beautifully written tribute...

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

froggy
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since 2003-06-23

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8 posted 2003-11-17 03:33 PM

Very well done my Dear Shakespeare.
I know who this sounds like. ;-)
Your truly are a master of disgruises too.
Love it.

;-)

Ribbits and Ribbits
you know what I mean.

froggy
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since 2003-06-23

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9 posted 2003-11-17 04:22 PM

Oh my Shakespeare,I was wrong with who you were writing about. I now know who.
Your bad LOL.
I agree the person with whom you speak does have some very good poetry.

Ribbits and Ribbits

:-)

littlewing
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10 posted 2003-11-18 12:21 PM

Is it Maree?

EvocativeVerse2
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11 posted 2003-11-18 12:52 PM

Hi froggy...glad you liked the poem.

Hi again littlewing. Nope it is not Marie. It was suppose to be YOU! (Wink!) Look at your poem titled Dogma and then re-read my poem. I thought I gave such a good hint naming the poem Belief since Dogma means tennets or beliefs. I suppose I went a little off the beaten path trying to do your style...but what the heck I gave it a go.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

littlewing
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12 posted 2003-11-18 01:18 AM

I knew it was me all along
didnt you see my first response up there?
I erased it . . and all the "little"
references *smiling*
LMAOO ahaha I knew I just didnt want to
be egotistical and claim it if it wasnt
I know I am a freak . . .

Kevin?
thank you so very much
I did know, the first time I read it
I knew . . .
the reverie . . the flow
all of it
and you write better than I write me
ahahaha I dont sound that composed in the second verse . . .

OMG thank you soo much
I am smiling huge here
you have done beautifully
I wish I wrote this
xxoo

well met indeed

[This message has been edited by littlewing (11-18-2003 01:21 AM).]

froggy
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13 posted 2003-11-18 01:40 AM

Just one more read here before heading off to dreamland.

Your totally amazing Kevin.

Ribbits and Ribbits

:-)

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