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Where We Left Us (Parts 1-2-3) Parts 1-2 revised a bit
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Where We Left Us (Parts 1-2-3) Parts 1-2 revised a bit |
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She Junior Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 41Wishing On A Northern Star |
Part One Night's curtains parted easily then we slid deftly between thin veils of light. The wind gave us wave songs as a favor to the soft step of love. You held my hands out with yours and I felt as if we were holding the ocean by its corners spreading it in front of us like a picnic blanket. I discovered that the wind startled at the caress of our hands. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Part Two Our discovery was moment by moment and on our picnic blanket ocean we dined heavily on hope. We walked on sand that scattered at our feet and it seemed as if each grain parted, politely curtsying before the air of us. I remember no words and the only way our mouths moved was to speak in a whispered lip language against one another. We were delicate and I found that our arms smiled back at one another ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Part Three We had pulled the sunset into our hearts with the grip of eyes and we used that glow to light a path of sight across waters that rustled to peaks at a mere touch of wind. There we found that our smiling arms had gentle passionate teeth. Those teeth pulled softly and firmly on walking wills pressing them close together. We were firmly planted in a place where we could make every moment a memory. We built with calm abandon and slow steady sighs. "You put a stain on all of my good days." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I discovered that the wind startled at the caress of our hands. ~*~ Ripples. This poem fairly ripples. Welcome back, She |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
This is one fine piece. Loved it! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I loved all of it, but this part, in particular, really spoke to me..... We had pulled the sunset into our hearts with the grip of eyes and we used that glow to light a path of sight across waters that rustled to peaks at a mere touch of wind. Absolutely beautiful, this is.  Hugs  Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-16-2003 04:01 PM).] |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Some very nice lines, enjoyed much. |
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