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vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

0 posted 2003-11-15 06:35 PM

sequestered 'neath the
rubble of
a thousand lives
not mine

muted cries through
rock formations
over head and
under foot

stone by stone
constructed in a
monument of
broken lives in
quarter time
resounding
sing the
echoes of a
heart entombed
before it's time was
meant to be
and even now
they weep...

but for themselves

and they are heard on high

these cries

resounding choirs of anguish
lost within a sanctuary
birdcage kept locked
key within grasp

ohh so close . .

that copper tinny taste
my palate awaits
the arrival, the beauty
the exhaulting psalm
of utter

release

_______________

Thank you, Sue...

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

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South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2003-11-15 06:37 PM

and thank you both, Sue and Vicky....
very well blended together...

Duncan
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2 posted 2003-11-15 06:51 PM

"echoes of a
heart entombed
before it's time was
meant to be
and even now
they weep...

but for themselves

and they are heard on high

these cries

resounding choirs of anguish
lost within a sanctuary
birdcage kept locked
key within grasp

ohh so close . ."

Enjoyed the style, flow, visual and angst of this. Impressive write you two...

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2003-11-15 07:00 PM

(big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, dearest Sue and Vicky, this made me cry as the imagery and matter is so intense and heartaching yet you offer sympathy and hope to all these who truly must crawl through the rubble and pray to keep breathing! (sad sigh) You bring compassion to many, sweet friend, God Bless You Both, we all love you so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Sue and Vicky, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-15-2003 07:01 PM).]

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

4 posted 2003-11-15 07:27 PM

sequestered 'neath the
rubble of
a thousand lives
not mine

You two are a wonder of words..truly!!
This made me breathe so deep and sigh so hard, while somewhere in between I felt the healing. Thanks for this jewel of a poem.

So pretty, ladies~

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2003-11-16 01:29 AM

Thank you Barry . . twas Vicky who inspired me . . . I was replying to one of her writes

Thanks Duncan . . . good to see you reading US *smile*

Noah, you are always so sweet and right on in your replies, I can always read what you see and understand myself that much better
thank you

Thanks Bluesygal . . . exactly what we mean to do . . make you FEEL
tweets

Thanks guys

and Vic? Thank you for the inspiraton, truly my sis

xxoo

passing shadows
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displaced

6 posted 2003-11-16 01:33 AM

I don't know how you do it...I can never think when someone asks me to duet...not even a first phrase

I admire you two!

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2003-11-16 02:48 AM

this...is combined beauty.

my my mysistas...

encore?

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2003-11-16 06:42 AM

I received the distinct picture
in my mind
of a pyramid...

duet again soon, you two...

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

9 posted 2003-11-16 08:32 AM

Wonderfully done both of you. Loved it!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

10 posted 2003-11-16 09:16 AM

Sue and Vicky,
You could not do better. Wonderful write.

NewEnglandlazurlu
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A Mountain Paradise

11 posted 2003-11-16 11:00 AM

Vicky and Sue this is about as good as it gets. You two are fabulous together.

Thank you ... hugs, Marti

“Prayer makes the heart large enough until it can contain God’s gift of Himself.”
Blessed Mother Teresa

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

12 posted 2003-11-16 11:03 AM

yes, combined beauty..as Serenity has said.

*s
M

Nan

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Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

13 posted 2003-11-16 02:19 PM

Very nicely done, ladies... The "rubble of a thousand lives..." This is some nice verse...

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

14 posted 2003-11-16 04:38 PM

Vicky & LittleWing~
I think this is very special~
Absolutely a marvelous meld of poetic voices~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

15 posted 2003-11-16 04:51 PM

Vicky and Sue, I love the way you two blended together.......one of the most perfect that I have seen in a duet. I honestly don't know who wrote which lines. Most of the time I see a difference, even if it is a slight difference. I would love to read more duets by you two!!!! Please?
Hugs

Ethel

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

16 posted 2003-11-16 04:57 PM

Purrrrrfection!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

17 posted 2003-11-16 07:40 PM

I knew that I had to click on a duet by you two special poetesses and women!

I would like to echo BluesSerenades eloquent reply! Those are my sentiments exactly! (She's good at writing my feelings! lol)

Sending a

for each of you & one for Lori for her apt reply that I
borrowed!

Linda

Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

18 posted 2003-11-16 07:54 PM

One of the best duets I have read, well done ladies.

Jason

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

19 posted 2003-11-16 10:38 PM

a trickle of light and a breath of air
if only on a prayer, yes i like this, cant tell where one began and the other ended
well done ,women

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

20 posted 2003-11-17 09:24 AM

Thank you Dixie and sure you can duet . .
*smile*  easy as riding a bike LMAO
thank you

my sweet sista K . . yes I am sure there will be thank you Lady

OMG Kari, cool . . *smile* instant imagery
thank you

Thank you Kevin so very much

aww Sy you are so sweet thank you

Hey Marti, thank you so much

Maureen . . thank you *smile*

Hey Nan, Oh My . . from you this means a lot thank you

Hey Marge, thank you so very much
*smiling*

Ethel, you are so sweet and honest
thank you so much an glad you liked
LittleOne

Thank you Meg, mreorrrwwwwww

See that now Linda?  Sheesh you had better save me a seat up there . . .
thank you

Jason, my good man thank you so very much a lot said right there

Thank you Michele, it was all Vicky, I just responded to one of her writings

Thanks guys
xxoo

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

21 posted 2003-11-17 12:39 PM

Duncan stole my favorite lines...

Wonderful combo!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

22 posted 2003-11-17 12:52 PM

What a dynamic duo ~ hmmm, so you do more than just talk all night LOL

Great work ladies.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

23 posted 2003-11-17 02:34 PM

Ahh what a fabulous blending, beautiful work Vicky and Sue. Please Duet again

MAree.

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

24 posted 2003-11-17 02:45 PM

Hi, all...I only have a minute, but wanted to
thank you all for the kind and generous comments.
They are truly appreciated...every one of them.

I'll be back to say more, when I have more time.
Meanwhile...love and hugs to you all...

And, Sue?...this was by no means 'all Vicky'...smile
You completed this...in more ways than one...

Thank you for YOU...
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Kazm
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Posts 99

25 posted 2003-11-17 03:41 PM

Two people wrote this together, but I can't tell any differences. It's wonderful. I can't visualize two people matching so well.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

26 posted 2003-11-17 03:49 PM

Beautiful blending of thoughts here..
please grace these blue pages with another duet soon!
Hugs to you both, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

27 posted 2003-11-18 12:26 PM

Thank you Susan, your words are just as fine *smile*

ahahahaha Sharon . . that was good
on this night YES thank you

Thank you Maree . . . you know I always
look forward to your insight
duet heh

Kaz, I dont know some days that woman just shares my brain . .  thank you

Thank you Nancy .  . so very sweet to us

Vicky, oh yes it was stop that
all I did was sneeze on the page
over there *smile*
I am grateful for you too,
me sis
thank you
and I do know

Thanks guys
xxoo

hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA

28 posted 2003-11-18 08:46 PM

a well blended write

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

29 posted 2003-11-18 10:48 PM

A wonderful blending of two fine poets.....

hugsssx2

Lauren~

I had a dream last night
you came to me on silver wings of light
I flew away with you in painted sky
Was it real
Is it what you see,touch or feel

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

30 posted 2003-11-19 10:28 AM

I often delay replying to a poem while it is still a hot topic. But, since this one doesnt seem to want to drift away, I'll let you know now, how very nice this reads.

It's a complete work and has none of the hesitancy that you see in a lot of duets

In a word, SMOOOOOOTH!

[This message has been edited by wranx (11-19-2003 10:29 AM).]

vandana

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31 posted 2003-11-19 10:36 AM

very nice

Cpat Hair

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32 posted 2003-11-19 10:38 AM

I'll echo Ed here.. smooth indeed...

littlewing
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New York

33 posted 2003-11-19 04:20 PM

Thank you so much hoot (hoo hoo was that an echo?)  Ok im nuts . . after seeing your acrostic I just about died and a sestina!
So thank you for this

Thank you so much Lauren

Baby?  thank you so much
*smiling*  you made em think of that
tune by Santana and Rob somebody . . .

" . . .because shee's soooo smoooth . . ."
Eddie?

Thank you V!

Ron thank you so much
yes, of course you would say that
you guys practically share the same
brain
*smile*
thank you

Thanks guys
xxoo

SEA

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with you

34 posted 2003-11-19 05:44 PM

you two blended perfectly here...I loved this

littlewing
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New York

35 posted 2003-11-20 09:47 AM

Thank you Susan
xxoo

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