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my_own_air
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0 posted 2003-11-13 09:26 AM


well i have joined here and i may say your poetry is very cool.
this is one of my first poems i have ever written. you can critisize it, if you want or say nothing ... well however. here it is:

-----*****-----

I loved my life when i was child,
i was having fun.
And though that life won’t like me just for a while,
but now know, that i was wrong, my hopes were in the sun.

I’m alone and don’t belong to anyone.

I knew he liked me,
when he looked up in my eyes.
I knew as one we’ll always be,
but now i know, that those were only lies.

I’m alone and don’t belong to anyone.

I thought it would last forever
our short relation-ship
but now i see the truth was never,
everything broke, nothing has keeped.

I’m alone and don’t belong to anyone.

I was crossing road
and then i saw my ex-friend.
There wasn’t crowd,
I didn’t ask her for, i knew she wouldn’t lend.

I’m alone and don’t belong to anyone.

I know the difference between now and then,
I don’t hope anymore
every look is damned,
and i’m a numb. Nothing less, nothing more.

I’m alone and don’t belong to anyone.

That doesn’n bother me.
I’m totaly free, but I know,
that my own life is one big stone.

I’m alone and don’t belong to anyone.


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Enchantress
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Canada eh.
1 posted 2003-11-13 09:47 AM


Good Morning and Welcome to Passions!
Believe me you won't be alone for long here.
We are a friendly family of poets.
Take your time have a look around at the other forums
and please enjoy yourself.
Any questions, please feel free to email myself or one of the other moderators.
Please check your email for a special greeting.
Nancy.

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2003-11-13 09:48 AM


MOA~
Welcome to the friendliest poetic circle on the entire Internet~

The read is sad ... but the repetition of 'I’m alone and don’t belong to anyone' ... very effective~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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Gaia
3 posted 2003-11-13 10:06 AM


Well, there's always room for another loner in here.

Welcome to Passions!

my_own_air
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4 posted 2003-11-13 10:12 AM


thanks for nice welcome
SharaRose
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Somewhere out there~
5 posted 2003-11-13 10:34 AM


[This message has been edited by SharaRose (11-13-2003 10:34 AM).]

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2003-11-13 10:45 AM



Welcome to Passions!  You will enjoy it here very much - as Marge said, we're one of the friendliest groups on the Internet...

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

Brad Majors
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Georgia
7 posted 2003-11-13 12:15 PM


Well done. In time it comes a bit easier. Read all the poetry you can.
passing shadows
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displaced
8 posted 2003-11-13 12:37 PM


this is a very sad write...but I can understand and relate well...I've been there and go back often to visit...

Welcome to Passions

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just out of reach
9 posted 2003-11-13 01:13 PM





Jes
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Denmark
10 posted 2003-11-13 01:45 PM


You can even be alone when ya rround a thousands, but one thing is sure never lie to ya heart but give it a smile.

Great to meet ya a smile for the next day

Smile

Jes


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11 posted 2003-11-13 03:34 PM






(big hugggsssssss) This is a sad but heartfelt debut, sweet friend, know you are never alone and you are special to so many as we are all happy to be your friend here at Passions, yay! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your heartfelt poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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