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Toby Junior Member
since 2003-09-21
Posts 12Ohio, United States |
I watch as my old friends come drifting through the city as i wonder if they think about me when i think about them; sometimes it makes me cry and other times I laugh thinking how stupid I might have been. I watch them at work I watch them at stores I feel like a stalker But I don't stalk I wonder if they know i'm around or if they sense it. Some days I wish I would die But I know something good will come out of it But so far it hasn't. As days go by, I feel I'm loosing more friends, more friends are moving out state away from me; It feels like they are trying to get away from me; It feels as if they don't like me; I know that's not true but that's how I feel; When friends move It's hard to stay in contact for me; I try and try but it's just no use either they don't call me or I don't have time. I wrote this poem on how I feel about my friends and ex-friends. I don't know if this poem is any good or not, I'm not a good poet, and i know that. But i am just starting off, and i dont like to rhyme. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Who says you have to rhyme?? I understand what you are saying. I moved to a city I love but there are no family nor friends here. (I have been here almost 9 yrs). I have one female friend (I never made female friends easy) and that is it... it does get lonely at times. you wrote of it well. Susan |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok Toby? I know exactly what you mean and it is a painful and tough transition: I watch as my old friends come drifting through the city as i wonder if they think about me when i think about them; sometimes it makes me cry and other times I laugh thinking how stupid I might have been. yes, me too xxoo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You're not a good poet??? You coulda' fooled me..... this a good piece of work, my friend, very insightful and cleanly written...and I prefer a poem that's written without trying to force rhyme into it just because it's a poem. Keep it up! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
I have stayed in one place all my life and have seen my friends move and never hear from them again. But.......Once in a great while all the friends come together to play music and it fills my heart with such joy. It touches my hearts so deeply I feel like crying from the happiness of the smiles and laughter. Never stop writing and sharing because you have a gift given to you, the gift of words and imagination. So write on and aim for the stars. Love and hugs Bon-Bon  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Toby A good write, enjoyed the read. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, I know just how you feel, but I truly believe that overall, your friends are not ignoring you and have not forgotten you, it's just the world keeps turning and nature must take its course by God and so we must keep moving, no matter how unfair that may sound sometimes! (sad sigh) I know for a fact you ARE a GOOD poet, and rhyming or not is not important in poetry, what's important is expressing to your hearts content and being honest and true of all you feel or think, and you have that natural ability! I send angel hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, you have friends, and you have many here too like me who think the most of you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Toby, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
enjoyed the write,,, |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
well, i think it's a good poem because as you can see from the replies, you have touched a nerve in your readers and isn't that what a good poem is supposed to do? Some days I wish I would die But I know something good will come out of it hang on to that, matey. i believe in these words too even when i feel no one cares about me and i'm all alone and lonely welcome to passions! |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Welcome to Passions.May you enjoy it here as much as I do.Poetry doesn't have to rhyme.Poetry is any cluster of words that is heartfelt.Just your thoughts and feelings are poetrry in themselves.  Crystal |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
poetry doesn't have to rhyme, it compliments the mind...and so does everyone in your life, even if you cannot keep contact Everyone whom you've met, has given to the quality of life, yours! Smiles and hugs |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I certainly identify with this one. They move away and drop off the face of the earth, it seems. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
This is very good. Very good. Don't worry about rhyming - it's not necessary. Seems like the only thing you're lacking here is a little dose of confidence I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Toby Junior Member
since 2003-09-21
Posts 12Ohio, United States |
I do have confidence though. It's just sometimes I feel like I don't and I sound like I don't, But I appreciate all the replys and thank you everyone The Poetry Corner |
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