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silenttruth
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0 posted 2003-11-07 06:37 PM


stuck
you're stuck and can't find a way out
looks like being a gangster isnt all its
fit to be three years today you joined now
you wanted out but they said no you ruenied
your life now two years lateryour still
running lets face it your life is nothin but
hiding we're running they're running faster
we move they follow theres no quiting now
we suffer cause of you never setteling down always on the run don't want death yet it feels like we're being hunted you made this chioce to live like this you can't sse how much i suffer if this is all your falut then why am i the one fleeing the pain?

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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2003-11-07 06:45 PM


Welcome to Passions.
Quite a subject for a first post, and full of passion and power.
We help each other here.  I find your style very unique.  If you run the spell check to catch the words spilled in the fury of art, the flow of your works will be smooth as glass.  Well done. Look forward to more. ThisDiamond

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2 posted 2003-11-07 07:44 PM


SilentTruth~
This is an emotive purge of thoughts~

Welcome to Passions~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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3 posted 2003-11-08 02:06 AM




(big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, that's what friends are for, they must stand up for each other and work together and you depict this gratitude in this powerful debut, I love it! Welcome to Passions, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much, and be sure to check your E-mail for a very special greeting from all of us here at Passions just for you! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Mystic One
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4 posted 2003-11-08 01:35 PM


Never run!!
Stand firm on your beliefs!!
Don't accept others advice!!
Look at your problem and you will find the answers!!


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5 posted 2003-11-09 09:27 PM


You're a solid thinker and you have a good feel for the way a poem needs to move. You're going to be just fine here....

Me Want More!

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6 posted 2003-11-09 10:24 PM



The despair is apparent in this writing... you accomplished a purpose here.  Please, enjoy your Welcome to Passion! and please know,
we are looking forward to more!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

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