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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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more than this ~**~ a release of horizon in pastel color winding through trees, bending rivers for that look of glazed stone each time it rains would it be the touch of your lips when I sleep a comfort I seek to know-- fragments of expressions explaining any question of love any subject, for how I feel when I draw you near closer--it seems I have invited my self to taste silver drops of water cascading down your back -- brimming in passion for the slightest feel a ray of light in morning whispers breaking through virgin curtains lighting your eyes in my reflection unsown in a path to the depths of my heart for one breath of your touch For Matthew--I still miss you ~**~ i carry your heart with me i am never without it you are what a moon has always meant sky of sky the wonder that keeps stars apart- e.e.cummings [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (11-04-2003 07:55 PM).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Lauren.... "lighting your eyes in my reflection unsown in a path to the depths of my heart for one breath of your touch" & "fragments of expressions explaining any question of love any subject, for how I feel when I draw you near" this is so tender, so beautiful  |
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rambling_words Junior Member
since 2003-10-29
Posts 44London, Ontario, Canada |
The images this created where magnificent. btw I loved your name, it is one of my favs by cold play. (even though that is probably not the inspiration behind your name) John |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Sea~ Hugsss hon, and thank you for the tender reply.... ~~**~~ John~ Which name? the poem title or greeneyes? the poem title was indeed inspiration.... thank you for your reply.... ~~**~~ Lauren~ i carry your heart with me |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful...perfectly beautiful! Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
a ray of light in morning whispers breaking through virgin curtains lighting your eyes in my reflection unsown in a path to the depths of my heart for one breath of your touch ~*~ You paint a beautiful rain of loss. It does you good, to be able to write of it. I'm proud of you. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ Just so softly lovely~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
a rain and passion mix, interesting  Martin aka ecrivan |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) Oh Lauren, my heart goes out to you, dearest friend, like your new picture kind of reveals, your new poetry feels a bit sad and I send angel healing comfort hugs your way! (sigh) Know Matthew will always have a special place in his heart for you, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a release of horizon in pastel color winding through trees, bending rivers for that look of glazed stone each time it rains ============================= I have invited my self to taste silver drops of water cascading down your back -- brimming in passion for the slightest feel a ray of light in morning whispers breaking through virgin curtains lighting your eyes in my reflection unsown in a path to the depths of my heart for one breath ==================================== Lauren this is such a stunning write... I love the images and the colors you used to paint the heart touching emotions. The love and devotion to this muse is palpable in this...it radiates from your exquisite words.  Words break into splinters on the pages I write |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Greeneyes One lucky guy. Enjoyed |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
unsown in a path to the depths of my heart for one breath of your touch For Matthew--I still miss you Oh Lauren, this hurt. We are both missing today, it seems. I'm trying to figure out which is worse..... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
oh L~ gal.....Hugs to you....so softly beautiful..... |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Lauren, I agree with Seymour. The next time it rains here Jax, I think about it somewhat differently than before. Images and thoughts abound. Enjoyed! "If this grand panorama before me is what you call God...then God is not dead." |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
love filters all things into goodness...acceptance, and the miracles which reach within...placing two within the closeness of each other, in reality, dreams, and greatness. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"would it be the touch of your lips when I sleep a comfort I seek to know-- fragments of expressions explaining any question of love any subject, for how I feel when I draw you near" Love this Lauren.  |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Breath taking. Eric |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lauren, you write of a yearning with such softness, yet with such intensity, hidden within. Very nice write. I hope he reads this....If were I, I would be very pleased. |
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