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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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there’s a leak in my head, where I’ve spent my hours breaking. in a while, these cracks will fix themselves. I am peaceful, I am useful, I fail so well. Help me dig in the graveyard, we will unearth these bones, we will rain with our insanity things fall to pieces, jagged and shining Grab my hand and pull me… either way is good, we rewrote the textbook, we broke the rules of mathematics, we jammed the puzzles into the wrong places your face is made of dirt and stone, worthless as the earth itself. give us reason, or nothing at all, I beg. combine these words into sentences, help make sense of my faults unfreeze my blood. things never add up What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall. -yorke/bjork [This message has been edited by Wind (11-03-2003 06:38 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Insanity reigns, yes it does. Saw a very interesting play yesterday - I have a feeling if you could ever see it, you would find yourself enjoying the entire concept. Proof, by David Auburn. I like the way you switched the title on me at the end. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
oh you uh...liked it? cause I changed it  heh What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
and changed it again  I like the backfire of my own words better What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"there’s a leak in my head, where I’ve spent my hours breaking. in a while, these cracks will fix themselves. I am peaceful, I am useful, I fail so well." Smiling at these lines kiddo...me, too. A third excellent write from you, in as many reads. I'm humbled, truly. (Did ya get the book?) |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
aww puppy. someday Iwanna be as good as you and no...I haven't bought the book yet  I will look in to it though What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Liz? precisely the reason I am horrid at Algebra . . . things just dont add up (not to me, they dont) *smile* xxoo |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
really liked this part..... "Help me dig in the graveyard, we will unearth these bones, we will rain with our insanity " such a cool write! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I'm gonna blame it all on you. things just... yanno? and two and two equals five... and...yawns.... blame it on the lack of sleep.... or the conspiracy...that it... snores...wake me up in 5 minutes What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
oh and sea thatnks What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
give us reason, or nothing at all, I beg. shouted this so many times i've lost count.. l@ved this Liz hey can you tell the nurse to send over my medication i'm getting antsy |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
pretty cool stuff, for a "begger"  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
and could you reach over and loosen my straight jacket a bit it's chafing..thanks ..and when youre deepest thoughts are broken keep on dreaming boy cause when you stop dreaming its time to die.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gah...I'm amazed at you |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Another good one, yay! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Liz...you are indeed a poet. Did you know that?  K |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"give us reason, or nothing at all, I beg. combine these words into sentences, help make sense of my faults unfreeze my blood. things never add up" Not in my world either...excellant writing..now go help Aenimal..he's chafing... "if you won't let me fall for you |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Damn Wind that is good. You have the ability to drag the reader on a roller coaster ride of thought making them see just what you want. Excellent poem. Well done. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
thank you everyone and Raph how do I loosen your straitjacket? I'm wearing one too yanno lucky these walls are so soft or otherwise I'dve hurt myself by now What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Like reading a book rotting, face-up. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Then again, sanity is overrated, so we never need a calculator to know things measure up! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Rotting books eh? and yep Noah...sanity is quite overrated. What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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