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Trench Coat
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Trench Coat I was so happy to have that second hand trench coat, not lined for warmth but flapping in the San Francisco air, as exuberant as my long long hair. I went to the docks holding the coat closed around me like a beige drenched lover, catching the smell of fish, and the rain was in my face. The silver slanted buildings reflected in the dimples of the water as I walked with a lovely joy born of youth and being cold and a crazy free feeling. Without that coat I might not have seen the seals slapping against the pilings as I ran down the street, or the man in a yellow slicker who looked with tarnished eyes at my matted sky rinsed smile. I loved that trench coat. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ratleader grabs Reply Number One, then goes back to edit in his comment..... I truly like this -- it shows a part of Martie that many of us haven't seen, and that everybody should see. Much more to you than meets the eye, though what meets the eye is enough for anyone! Thanks for sharing this extra portion..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ [This message has been edited by Ratleader (11-03-2003 06:24 PM).] |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"I went to the docks holding the coat closed around me like a beige drenched lover, catching the smell of fish, and the rain was in my face. The silver slanted buildings reflected in the dimples of the water as I walked with a lovely joy born of youth and being cold and a crazy free feeling." Made me smile Martie. Amazing what you made me feel with a poem about a trenchcoat. Some very fine writing, filled all the senses...  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Without that coat I might not have seen the seals slapping against the pilings as I ran down the street, or the man in a yellow slicker who looked with tarnished eyes at my matted sky rinsed smile." Without this life, I might have missed your smile.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Martie..I love this!! It's so free, open and....UP!!!  Very much enjoyed...I want me a trench coat! Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
as I walked with a lovely joy born of youth and being cold and a crazy free feeling. ~*~ I remember that feel. Thanks for slipping it back into my thoughts. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - you look wonderful in that trench coat - you write it so well - Paul |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Martie? just when I think I have seen everything YOU WRITE *smile* holding the coat closed around me like a beige drenched lover, what amazing precious lines and OH that feeling of free YES I love this you amaze me consistently xxoo |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is wonderful, Martie! Core |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is so vivid... so ALIVE. *S* I like it very much. *S* |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
A little nostalgia from the Lady M. Well done dear one. Another twinkling write from your HUGE bag of poetic tricks... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
at my matted sky rinsed smile. ============================== and oh how I love your poetry. could that line be any cooler??? Love the exhuberance and innocence of this write Martie-girl.  Words break into splinters on the pages I write |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I never know exactly what to say to you Martie...I'm always left speechless |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Martie! Good, good stuff here. I learned to love that trenchcoat, too! Thanks, Larry |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Exceptional imagery Martie. keeping it. Maree fate is not just |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I have a trench coat and have never gotten to use it for what I got it for... Martie this was beautiful, light and so wonderfully written! Was it at Fisherman's Wharf? I loved that place... Susan Almost forgot: I love the new pic!! "if you won't let me fall for you then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you" ~Dido~ [This message has been edited by Susan Caldwell (11-04-2003 08:54 AM).] |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
What a wonderful story told in such poetic words! Eric |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sis~ 'I went to the docks holding the coat closed around me like a beige drenched lover' *sighing* at the thought~ SO Martiesque~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you for taking this journey into the past with me...and yes, Susan, it was fisherman's wharf, but the back side of it. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Oh I love this Martie! Very well done. Made me think of an old blue long coat I used to own in high school. Man I loved that thing...the way it billowed out behind me like wings when I walked in the breeze, the way it could be wrapped tightly about me to keep out the breeze. Bravo! Loved it! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Love this! and its freeedom . . . |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
love this, you wrap the reader with emotions just as the coat wrapped you.....very very well presented pretty lady |
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