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rambling_words
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since 2003-10-29
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London, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-11-03 01:46 PM


I stand as a broken man in a field of dying corn
the light of the day drowning into the horizon of the sea
its waters still flowing over the shore as the winter approaches from the north
I feel the shortening of the day and the prolonging of the night
hour after hour of burning candles silhouetting my soul in shadows
I heal my wounds in darkness their emptiness lingers inside my heart
it is a slow process unlike the changing of summer to autumn or autumn to winter
it is a long process of waiting for winter to change to spring
this is what breaks me on this late Thursday on the verge of November
it may not snow tomorrow despite the uncertainty of Canadian weather
but it is cold and it could rain
weather that makes me wish I could lie down in the arms of an angel
feel her feathered wings upon my withered body
covers of knitted wool on skins of golden flesh
instead I watch the Praire sun leave Saskatoon in darkness
lyrics from a Tom Cochrane song rising out of the ashes of a fire
wheat kings blowing in the wind of their queens voices
travelling whispers of other story tellers spread out across the land
east to west and everything in between
I watch the last of white rays lay down upon the water
blue black darkness and brown black emptiness
on the barren ground under a canopy of emerging stars
I pray to the unknown for sleep to come out of the constellations
explosions of fireworks welcome me to the dreams of another night
it may seem right
to never wake with out you
but those are the dreamers of a dreamer.  



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Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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Florida
1 posted 2003-11-03 02:16 PM


"blue black darkness and brown black emptiness"

This is amazing...

Susan

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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2 posted 2003-11-03 04:05 PM


Solid! Good progression, and a crisp image in every line. Well done.

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