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Their Destinies |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Time dashed the door on hurried wing into the darkened chilling frost. As warriors rode in cloak of night to warn the realm of peril’s cost. He bade farewell, a last goodbye, a gentle kiss born of the eve. She failed to see the welling tear descending as he rode in grief. From tethered lips and unfound words upon their bed in hurried throes. They loved as though to be their last before the clash of dreaded foes. Of finest stock and loyalty, eight riders left the courtyard bare. Toward the east, their destiny, on but a wing and whispered prayer. They knew their odds to be most great, to fill the ground from arrow’s flight. And from the stare of waiting fear they cast their lot one moonless night. When dawn does break the hanging dew upon the vine of liberty. Eight riders fight, these valiant few, until their deaths, their destiny. [This message has been edited by Magnus (11-02-2003 09:51 PM).] |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Though told with an archaic tone, and in romantic scenes, this is something that has happened throughout history, is happening now and will happen tomorrow, and it's far too real. Well done. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Nan, thanx for the reminder that this act of courage still goes on...as the words fill this page, there are those who are giving their life for freedom...Living out their destinies. Saying tearful goodbyes and taking lonely walks down darkened streets to a place where they climb into their own saddle...and bid farewell. Yes, this poem is about more than a moment of centuries ago...for the only thing that has changed is how to kill... |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This is a destiny that I wish didn't have to happen, but for the cause it keeps us strong and free. Crystal |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
words of chivalry are always some of my favorite... they ache so much though. You write it well sir. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gah awesomely done! |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Mmm bravo Barry. Very well done. The rhyme scheme is wonderful. There is definitely a sing-song meter within the verses. I watch and unlock the secrets. (Keep them coming!) Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Barry you do this so well! I am enjoying them!  "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
great poetry Barry!!!! Paul |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I felt swept away with the brashness and vitality of your valiant write!   EA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
In so few lines, you tell a great story... and make us care for the characters... This is excellent! *S* |
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