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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2003-11-01 02:43 PM

I give to thee my heart this day
I leave for thee, I must not stay.
A life you hold in wraps to see
Our newborn babe, our destiny.

And from the rage of swelling tide
a treasure found, it cannot hide.
A jewel of green, a golden bar
a glint and gleam upon our star.

For in this night, this chilling night
a rider comes to warn of fright.
A king once scorned now seeks my head
and I must flee his waiting dread.

His men shall be in wait of me.
They stand amongst the granite scree.
A blade shall glint against the light.
My love, my love, I leave this night.

And till the dawn 'fore crescent moon
I must retire, to return soon.
Forget I’ll not, my chosen wife.
I bequeath you, our newborn life.

[This message has been edited by Magnus (11-01-2003 02:59 PM).]

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

1 posted 2003-11-01 02:55 PM

Ah, I saw Lancelot, Gallahad and the Round Table...well written sir...maybe you should repalce this guy when he leaves...hee, hee

jwesley

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2003-11-01 03:14 PM

(smiles) You seriously should consider giving the Round Table a renaissance and representing the head of it, yay! (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is most deep and honest poetry, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

3 posted 2003-11-01 03:17 PM

youre a natural with this style,
very very nice

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

4 posted 2003-11-01 03:37 PM

Very well done, Barry.

Patricia

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

5 posted 2003-11-01 03:54 PM

Barry

You are such a master of the quill and this was nothing short of fabulous.

Take care.......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

6 posted 2003-11-01 06:45 PM

enjoyed

Magicmystery
Senior Member

since 2002-02-13

Posts 821
Windsor, Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2003-11-01 08:35 PM

I'll be brief... because this poem rendered me speechless.... Well, sadly and written with hope. I enjoyed it much.

Sherry

Bec
Member

since 2001-02-23

Posts 475
Canberra

8 posted 2003-11-02 06:11 AM

Ooh, I like this one! I too saw the whole medieval scene. Congratulations, this is great.

B

"I'm not crazy I'm just a little unwell"~ Matchbox 20

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2003-11-02 08:49 AM

This is one of those poems I didn't want to end. *S* Touching excellence!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2003-11-02 09:06 AM

Sounds of the Highwayman...

well done, Sir.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

11 posted 2003-11-02 10:28 AM

Very much enjoyed, I haven't been reading for awhile, this reminds me what I have been missing.
Sandra

IrishDreamer
Member

since 2003-10-18

Posts 55
Kansas

12 posted 2003-11-02 11:04 AM

Thanks for sending me back a few hundred years into fantasy land this morning. Great write really enjoyed this one.

~Angie~

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

13 posted 2003-11-02 11:05 AM

Goodness what a beautiful medieval tale
Barry? I knight thee . . . sir
(Aragorn?)
*smile*
xxoo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

14 posted 2003-11-02 12:48 PM

every time I turn around, you have written something in a different style...this is a sadly beautiful write Barry, very touching

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

15 posted 2003-11-02 01:34 PM

hehehe I love this period of time..It's amazing, but I got this feeling of being on the run...well sort of...Like " I shot the sheriff but I did not shoot the deputy, and then another song " On the road again"..and Good Hearted woman in love a good timin' man. WOW...you just opened up a bunch of things. Bcoz that's not all. WOW and the mind travels on...hahaha

Love,
Terri~

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