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rambling_words
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since 2003-10-29
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London, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-10-30 10:24 PM


Sadness surrounds me in this room of darkness
A piano plays dusting its keys off with ghost fingers
Each note is an old memory
Of a face I loved
Of a place I lived
Towns of strangers afraid to meet a drifter's eyes
Full of amazement as the hot air balloons took flight
Like the free bird he wished to be
Those days are gone like these days of summer
Fading into the changing colours of autumn
Where green-eyed girls become a blue-eyed boys dream
The muse for a lost poet
Standing on the edge of nothing looking for everything
In an atmosphere of every changing satellites
Spinning out of control like his regrets
Crashing into this dark room tonight
Where a candle fills the void in absence of a light
Flickering in the echoes that come off the stereo
Whispering voices that fade as the piano dies.


© Copyright 2003 John Raeside - All Rights Reserved
Suetang
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1 posted 2003-10-30 10:31 PM


Wow, John!

This was a fabulous piece of writing which was so much enjoyed by this reader.

"A true poet speaks from the heart
and touches the soul"

Take care..........Sue

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I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2003-10-31 11:01 AM



I know those keys...
and I've seen that young man...
as I have green eyes.

You made me think of some time ago
and of certain people.

Thank you very much for that.

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2003-10-31 12:35 PM


John~
WOW !
This is as fine a read as I'll find today~
I just like the all of it~
Notes of reminisce ... lovely~

Welcome to Passions~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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Earth Angel
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4 posted 2003-10-31 12:42 PM


My goodness, you certainly can set the tone to create a mood. Wow! Your talent is very evident with this write, my fellow Ontarian!
You make me proud!

These are a few of the many lines that really made me stand up and take notice! ~

*  A piano plays dusting its keys off with ghost fingers
Each note is an old memory

*  Towns of strangers afraid to meet a drifter's eyes


*  The muse for a lost poet
Standing on the edge of nothing looking for everything

Gosh, yer gooooood!

HHH
Linda

No tricks! Just treats!

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2003-10-31 12:47 PM


yeah, I know what you mean

*sigh*

Martie
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6 posted 2003-10-31 12:59 PM


rambling words

I've heard my old piano played that way too...the memory is sad, but also feels good.  Thank you for bringing it back to me.

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
7 posted 2003-11-01 07:32 PM


Fading into the changing colours of autumn
Where green-eyed girls become a blue-eyed boys dream
The muse for a lost poet
Standing on the edge of nothing looking for everything

You hit the key notes so well.
Love the sound of this,
as well as the piano playing in the background.

Fabulous poem rw~

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
8 posted 2003-11-01 07:35 PM


Incredible piece of writing here John.
Much enjoyed!
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

Magicmystery
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since 2002-02-13
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Windsor, Ontario, Canada
9 posted 2003-11-02 02:02 AM


I give this one two thumbs up...
I was given over to remembering my own piano... growing up... and being there thru many moves... many places.... being there like an old friend.... each chipped key, each scratch on the wooden surface.... and the time my mother broke off the hammer on the F# key frustrated about not getting a song right.... forced me to learn most of what I play by ear to this day in the key of E-flat ... now I'm rambling... but that is what your poem did for me.

Well Written and enjoyed.

Sherry


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