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GG
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since 2002-12-03
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Lost in thought

0 posted 2003-10-30 10:15 PM



My heater set on high
I listen to its fan,
And my typing on the keys.

Eyes closed,
(for lights bring pain to me)

I crunch a stale tortilla chip
And one more…
To keep the after taste away.

It’s just another lonely day…

Observing every breath
(because each one brings pain to me)

Then choking on my tongue
I catch myself in fall
For I have waited too long…

And now I take a sip of  last week's 7up
And one more…
To keep the after taste away.

It’s just another lonely day…


- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)


[This message has been edited by GG (10-30-2003 10:17 PM).]

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jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
1 posted 2003-10-30 10:19 PM


Loved it!  Your writing, though different in ways, reminds me of another who used to grace this place with her words, and that, my friend, puts you in select company as far as I'm concerned.

Enjoy reading you...

jwesley

GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
2 posted 2003-10-30 10:26 PM


jwesley,
thank you! I'm honored, I think would love to know who I remind you of though..!
good to have your reply dear sir

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

rambling_words
Junior Member
since 2003-10-29
Posts 44
London, Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2003-10-31 03:06 PM


I really liked this, very real.

John

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
4 posted 2003-10-31 03:08 PM


Full of truth this is. I loved it.

Cold hands means a warm heart

GG
Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
5 posted 2003-10-31 10:07 PM


rambling words and loner...
I was real bored when I wrote this.. can you tell? lol... I think thats why its real, I was just sittin there bored and alone. Thanks for your replies glad you enjoyed it.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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