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Standing Here
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Standing Here |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279
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Standing Here I stand here watching the ships sail by-- --Upon calm tranquil seaways of green. Their bows chisel water like a knife, Sailing away to a better life, O’ that is a sight I've never seen. I stand here watching and have to sigh, For colossal chains secure me here. And bleary eyed I beseech thee why? To what do they sail can thee reply? Would my leaving hold back just one tear? I stand here remembering friends made, When a convulsion jerks at my heart. The memories are old…nothing new, Remembered emotions now untrue. O’ where’s my navigational chart? I stand here thinking of things forbade, And questioning the things that I see. Is this the life that I wish to live? There is nothing more that I can give. When will it be the season for me? I stand here reckoning the true price, One pays when they give up on a dream. When it is time to sum up the cost, I keep measuring what has been lost, Thus wishing that it had never been. I stand here with a heart made of ice, And I question if you ever knew. All those whispered melodious words-- --Were naught but the twittering of birds. Insignificance we gave tongue to. I stand here watching as time goes by, O’ how I would like to sail away. Yea I’d leave my yesterdays behind, I’d be fresh of body, soul, and mind, That’s the dream for which I often pray. Here stands the life, in which I will die, And I wish it were surely untrue. Yea my existence is not my own, In this reality I’ve no known, For my being oft belongs to you. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kevin, first, THANK YOU for breaking your stanzas down so that they are read with more ease. My eyes, and my brain, thank you. Then... quote: The use of the word "convulsion" really makes this whole poem. So often, people talk of hearts breaking, flipping, burning, etc., but hardly ever does one make the heart react with reality, and to know that a heart can convulse is more apropos. Thank you for such a stirring write. You are swiftly becoming a Must Read. |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
I have to agree with Sunshine here.... You are a "must read" for sure". I do love your work... you add that 5th line into your stanzas that tie it all into a neat little bundle. And you do this consistantly and without fear!!! Your rhyme scheme makes perfect sense to me... I have made some myself where there are 6 lines per stanza and the rhyme scheme goes 123 123... makes for an interesting read.... back to yours..... I loved it.... This is what I mean when I wrote earlier, I know what it's like to miss a place... and want to go there or anywhere but where you are chained right now. You spoke my heart today. Missing Winsor very much.... and my father owns the sail boat that travels to exotic ports every year.... it's in my blood to move around like this I guess. So it is with more than a little heartbreake that I am chained here. Well said and well read. I'm gonna be looking for more of you here now. Sherry  [This message has been edited by Magicmystery (10-30-2003 02:09 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Kevin, I enjoyed this piece. I wish too that I could leave yesterday. Nice ending line. Nice rhyme scheme. Nice format!  excellent job! |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Shakespeare No finer of words have I heard. Love it my friend. :-) |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sunshine said stirring...and I will too, because it is! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Evocative, An interesting write and I enjoyed the read. |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Shakespeare, I had to read this again :-) is there room in your pocket for a little lean mean one? LOL Hugs from one to another. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Kevin This is the first of your poems that I have read and I must say I was very impressed. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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