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Bath Away the Day I Say
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Bath Away the Day I Say |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Bath away the day I say, I gladly give it to the water. Take the key and lock the door That’s my alma mater. Light the candle upon the tub And reach to flick the switch. Turn on the hottest water Then take off every stitch. Anndddd soak! Soak away the blasting talk, Soak away inner scream, Soak away the numbing. Soak in self-esteem. When the water begins to cool Heat it once again. With your hand pull the plug, Send intensity down the drain. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
nothing (well, almost nothing) beats a hot bath....  |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome write. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Ahhhhh..sigh..... Love, Terri~  |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
Gawd!!! I've had those days.... and yes super soaker in the tub for a few hours takes all the tension from your life.... light the candle run the water and pour myself a cold beer... better yet.... keep the pack close on ice....LOL I loved this poem. Sherry |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I second the motion, sadie! (I just got a great deal on sea salt in bulk too--great for those purifying baths...mmm.) and sigh. That really does sound good about now. Enjoyed, and hey? I know you are new here (at least I think you are--so many aliases I quit trying to figger them out) But would you mind if I challenge you to a follow up on this one? Write and tell us about the experience of the bath--tell us what you pour into the water, and are there candles, do you read in the tub? Am I asking too many questions? giggle. Of course I am. But if you are up to it, I would love to hear... Thanks?  I type too much. Must be the merlot. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Sadelite- I think that I shall take your advice. It definately seems very sound. karen- That sounds like it would be a good challenge for everyone to describe their bath experience... I'll let you know what I come up with. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I also like this poem, Good rhyme good flow, Minor mechanical things might be done, alllll gone at the end perhaps. Serenity is correct, more poems are a good idea, Naturally that will need further study, I hope you can enjoy being in hot water. Gloom |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sade? every single day, I do and yes . . . essential Sorry if I missed your entrance Welcome to PIP! this is lovely xxoo |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
welcome to passions enjoyed |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
I love this poem! Reminds me of J.R.R. Tolkien's work. If you ever get the chance to read his hobbit Ode to the bath at the end of the day I think it might bring a smile to your face. Well done Sadelite. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
SEA, You got that write. I'd be doomed to -ell (yell) without a bath! Hot bath to you! Sadelite the_loner_23, Glad you thought so. I've been so heavy in my thought lately that I thought it wise to lighten up. Baths are miracles. Sadelite Shara Rose, I bet I know what you're thinking! Go grab that bath while it's still hot! Don't forget the towel! Sadelite Magic mystery, Super soaker, eh? Love the sound of those words. The beer? You can have the beer and trade it for a nice cup of steaming tea! Glad you like it. Enjoy the "suds" Sadelite Serenity blaze, Hm. Never thought of myself as a Sadie, but more as a satelite, always orbiting somewhere out there! But, Sadie does have a certain ring to it! I can do Sadie... As to the challenge, i'm definitely not in one of those romantic moods that i want to ponder things like that; so i'll meet your challenge, but in a different way. Enjoy! Sadelite BATH AT YA BLAZE! Buzzing through the paper I read it loud and clear “Huge incredible white sale- only happens once a year!” I crumpled up the newspaper removed it from my lap, grabbed the old tennies, and my purse by its long strap. The mercantile was open But I could barely shove me in. Feet stopped. Glaring eyes. Man this is pandemonium! In trusty tennies and quick pivot toe I headed out the door. Thoughts of new towels and sheets No longer did I explore. Sore feet, longggg soak That would do the trick. Stepped in burning furnace water And lit the candlewick. Ahhhhhh So in answer to your question, Blaze, How did “Bath Away the Day” come to be? With pen clutched between index and big toe Words just kept on splashing me! Ahhhh… Ha! And a splish splash to all you ! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Ringo, I think Serenity's challenge is a pretty good idea, too. Grab your pen and let's get at it! (Nah, you get at this one. I just did mine!) Sadelite little wing, Sade? This might be a great idea. I can't remember how to misspell Sadelite all the time. Engrained--what can i say? I also "strongly" agree. Baths are esscential! I've been known to take as many as three a day if needed. Better than aspirin! Sadelite |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Evocative Verse 2, Hey! You're bath here again! Great to hear from you. Tolken? You must must be a jolken with me! Thank you very much for the incredible comment. If you post me again, please be so kind as to tell me which of his books i can find that poem. Thanks again, Saelite |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Ah yes, to the Professor, Good flow is right! And the water keeps on flowing! Thank goodness! Thanks for your advice. I used in in my challenge. Teach me more. You're the Prof! Sadelite |
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