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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Daughter As winds whipped Autumn's scattered cloak of colors Into whirl against the sky And chill climbed unclad ankles Billowing skirts and Encouraging scurry From even accomplished lollygaggers, Time stopped for me And I held the promise of spring To the curve of my breast. I'd uttered words Of love and passion, professed To know their meaning But gazing at you, a feeling Never once imagined Transformed my existence Exploded in my cells. I knew I'd go through hell And more for you Without hesitation. Years have passed But memories don't fade And October brings A portal through time I grasp your tiny hand in mine. Through eyes that blur with tears I see those yesteryears More clearly than today, Welcome you with soft whisper - You were the best of me. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Suthern, they are, aren't they....and can be so deeply loved as well as so stubborn and all those other words so typical of our children.... A beautiful poem. |
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Atrum Mortalis New Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 9 |
wow the images you produced through your use of adjectives really captured me. children can be a pain. Im not a father yet but im an older brother by 14 years and it is funny how they act sometimes |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I see those yesteryears More clearly than today, Welcome you with soft whisper - You were the best of me." This is truly a beautiful piece of writing Suthern... A keeper for my library. Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Awwww, Suthern gal...You know that I know!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
As winds whipped Autumn's scattered cloak of colors Into whirl against the sky And chill climbed unclad ankles Billowing skirts and Encouraging scurry From even accomplished lollygaggers, Time stopped for me And I held the promise of spring To the curve of my breast. =========================== And October brings A portal through time I grasp your tiny hand in mine. Through eyes that blur with tears I see those yesteryears More clearly than today, Welcome you with soft whisper - You were the best of me. =================================== You will already know I am loving the allits..the assonance and the word play ...the first verse was moth heaven  Yes -- YES... tis a poem and then some... you have made free verse your own with this graceful, tender beauty. And I held the promise of spring To the curve of my breast. what a poetically perfect personifi That this a sharing of your words and heart for another, makes it even more special. Very lovely Ruth-girlie.  You're the color of the sky reflected in each store-front window pane ... You're the whispering and the sighing of my tires in the rain. J. Browne [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (10-29-2003 12:06 AM).] |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Touching Very Touching~!~ I'd Rather Be Hated For Who I Am Then Loved For What I'm Not~!~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You have wrapped me in the warmth of your heart in this absolutely beautiful piece. Sheer poetic grace Love and hugs Liz |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I'd uttered words Of love and passion, professed To know their meaning But gazing at you, a feeling Never once imagined Transformed my existence Exploded in my cells. I knew I'd go through hell And more for you Without hesitation Suthern, I think anyone who has beared a child can relate to this as I know I feel just like this when it comes to April. Very well done, a poetic joy to read. Hugs. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
how very beautiful thank you for sharing this treasure a keeper |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern To hug you is to know you, |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Suthern, good Lord yes reminds me of my son, indeed Bless your Heart for this and for you and her But gazing at you, a feeling Never once imagined Transformed my existence Exploded in my cells. I knew I'd go through hell And more for you Without hesitation. as a loving mother would . . . without a blink beautiful xxoo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Gentle and good....what a sweet remembrance. Laura, the best of you seems wonderful indeed. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a lovely gift to that memory, Suthern. I wish I had written this. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Magnus: Thank you so very much, kind sir. *S* Atrum: I am so glad you liked… thank you… and welcome to Passions! *S* Enchantress: I am truly honored… thank you very much! *S* Martie: You were in my thoughts, lady… JM: You always find the best in my words… and me. *S* I can’t thank you enough. *S* s1nfully: Thank you very much… and welcome to Passions! *S* Elizabeth: And you fill my heart… I thank you so very much! *S* GS: To bring anyone joy is a blessing… I thank you so much for liking. *S* Midnitesun: To know you consider it a treasure means much to me… thank you! *S* Seymour: And to know you is to love you. *S* Thank you! *S* littlewing: To know this touched the mothers is an honor indeed… thank you! *S* Ratleader: I thank you so much, my friend… you read me better than I write… and I’m grateful! *S* Sunshine: You honor me, talented lady… I thank you so much! As many of you know, my tremendous yearning for children bore only grief… This was written for someone who knows the greater grief of having that miracle in their life and arms for all too short a time. Thank you all so much for allowing me the belief I approached doing her justice. *S* |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Years have passed But memories don't fade And October brings A portal through time Doesn't it though~ This is a treasure and you are such a love. Suthern~  |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
very touching indeed..what a mother can never forget, enjoyed Martin aka ecrivan |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Suthern, you are such a loving, caring, beautiful and compassionate soul. I really felt your words and it brought back memories of my own. This poem must have meant a great deal to the mother for whom it was intended. ~ May your goodness be rewarded many times over, Dear Belle of the South!  A beautiful gift of words... Loving hugs, Linda |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Did I mention that the sensitivity and grace of this poem simply astounds me? You enter another person's emotional world in a way that is utterly valid, and then wag a finger our way to invite us to join you there. Good work, this, all the way through. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Bluesy: Thank you so much, sweet lady... I'm glad you think so! *S* EA: I so hope she sees it... and hope it does. *S* Thank you so much, my friend... you see me through kind eyes... and I'm grateful. *S* Jamie: Your kind response astounds me... and leaves me filled with gratitude. *S* Thank you so very much!!! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Suthern, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, I know your mother will always love you as you will always be her little girl just as every other daughter will always have special memories close to heart! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Suthern, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Suthern~ I don't have words ... just a tear-in-trickle at the very beauty of your thoughts~ You're pretty gosh darn special~  I love you my friend~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
M'toe: Thank you very much... I appreciate you! *S* Marge: If that's true, it's only because I read the book you authored on being special... and tried to emulate. *S* Thank you so much, my friend... I love you. |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
Sweet Suthern, I must admit that I thought this a page from your life before reading the explanation you provided. A tribute to your remarkable talent and gentle soul, me thinks. [This message has been edited by Edder (11-02-2003 05:41 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh my...I must share this with my daughter! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Edder: What a kind response... I thank you so very much. *S* PS: That gave me a big smile, my friend... thank you! *S* |
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