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And A Tear Falls
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And A Tear Falls |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Wafting softly through his senses, knowing she must be within him as he slept peacefully. A small twitch tattling on the still form showing life within tired limbs of a slumbering poet. A quill resting within a hand, sporadically moving, still composing a prize yet to be seen and shared. What might a soft twitch foretell of him? One who sleeps silent to the world outside shuttered windows of a cottage, nestled high among whispering pines. Gently touching an arm, raising the soft hairs with a delicate fingertip. A smile within her eyes as she grazed a kind soul. Sleep covers passion that lies briefly dormant, awaiting a stir of coals and the heat of breath to again feed the fires to a raging torrent. One now tempered by middle age. Darting eyes behind weathered lids, moving to and fro. Searching the veil of mist for a glimpse of a gown, opaque, yet flowing gently to the wisp of a breeze. Slowly, ever slowly she kneels beside him, admiring one she has loved in life, in dreams... held closely to a beating chest as shivers brought the flesh to rise in bumps... She shudders...remembering yet another night, where candles fell slowly into the cooling pool of light's wax and shadows danced walls above...as sighs, gentle sighs... graced delicate ears. And a tear falls...as a door softly closes behind her. Time is nigh. Her muse, giggling, awaits the soft touch of passion which shall flow the clear waters this eve... [This message has been edited by Magnus (10-28-2003 08:56 PM).] |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
you made a tear fall on this face! How do you do this? *sigh* so amazing Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry...this is very touching! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
remarkable barry |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Wonderfully descriptive writing... me thinks you could turn this into a prose piece and tell even more of a story. Romanticly lovely penning poet sir  You're the color of the sky reflected in each store-front window pane ... |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Deep And Touching Loved It Alot~!~ I'd Rather Be Hated For Who I Am Then Loved For What I'm Not~!~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Barry? you must put these together please they are entwined within each other a storyboard here . . . My God this is lovely *smile* xxoo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, You were flying with the angel for a moment. Well done. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Methinks the Brothers Grimm had a third brother that still haunts literary pages making sure their name never dies... Keep weaving, the woman in the cottage has her spindle set to gold. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
She shudders...remembering yet another night, where candles fell slowly into the cooling pool of light's wax and shadows danced walls above''' ~~~~~~~~~ Striking image....and familiar longing.... hugssss Lauren~ Will the wind ever remember the names |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
very nice |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Bravo! I love this piece Magnus. Definitely it is at the top of my #1 must read list for the day! It is a piece of pure brillianse. Thank-you for posting it. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
She shudders...remembering yet another night, where candles fell slowly into the cooling pool of light's wax and shadows danced walls above...as sighs, gentle sighs... graced delicate ears. And a tear falls...as a door softly closes behind her. Time is nigh. Her muse, giggling, awaits the soft touch of passion which shall flow the clear waters this eve... Barry, as always, I was right there, seeing everything as I read it. Oh how I wish that I knew how to write the way you do. I saw back in CA where you said that you read a lot of poetry writing books. What are the names of some of them? I've bought some books, but would like to buy more. Thanks, my friend  Hugs  Ethel |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
For some reason, this poem has stayed with me, so I have decided to put it in my library... you don't mind, do you?  |
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