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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2003-10-26 07:35 PM

Guide  me

River of peace
   my eyes sailing
through empty streets

Dreams    golden nights
   paintings of paris--
I have walked this land

My hands like water

clouds falling through
   blackness

In silence    still --
  ocean blue --
sunsets -  jewels of      lonely skies

Edge walking      in thoughts  my own
I claim  all -  however painful, powerful,
                  truthful
manner of grace   long forgotten ticks

    Clocks  bleed    time
each fall   each echo

our lips hushed

    voices beyond control
seperated    love   and do we   hate?

can I be   so human   to remember your breath

cold     worn   on shoulders    eight walking,
among    paths of lost worlds
with no canopys   no shelter

I,  just a shell,
     broken wings,
a prayer  in unwanted travel

I let you die  in my mind; in my heart
sweet abondonment   of any rising sun

cry now

your graceful birds
    are looking down upon earth
with raven eyes

can I ever understand?

Will the wind ever remember the names
it has blown in the past with
its crutch its old age and its widsom
it whispers no this won't be the last

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2003-10-26 07:42 PM

"I,  just a shell,
     broken wings,
a prayer  in unwanted travel

I let you die  in my mind; in my heart
sweet abondonment   of any rising sun

cry now

your graceful birds
    are looking down upon earth
with raven eyes

can I ever understand?"

Sitting here shaking my head in awe of your talent...
Lovely lady...just like you.
Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2003-10-26 07:54 PM

(big hugggssssssss) You are the painter, and if you don't understand, you can always interpret it just as you always do with your watercolor musings, yay! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2003-10-26 08:05 PM

softly sad, a heartsong from a beautiful poetic palette

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

4 posted 2003-10-26 08:18 PM

Yes, I think softly sad if very befitting
of this piece.... well done Lauren...

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

5 posted 2003-10-26 09:00 PM

you always evoke such emotion from your readers..magnificent

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

6 posted 2003-10-27 10:35 PM

Thank you all for the replies, I appreciate you taking time to read...

MUWWWAAAHHHSSS and HUGSSSSSS

Will the wind ever remember the names
it has blown in the past with
its crutch its old age and its widsom
it whispers no this won't be the last

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

7 posted 2003-10-27 10:39 PM

Always a pleasure to read what you offer.

This is no different....

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

8 posted 2003-10-27 10:42 PM

Couldn't pick out anything in particular I liked about this, my friend - I LOVED IT ALL!

Beautifully written.

jwesley

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

9 posted 2003-10-27 11:24 PM

I let you die in my mind; in my heart
sweet abondonment of any rising sun
==============================

*heavy sigh* ... yessssssssss

another work of poetic art from your butterfly pen. Beautiful write Lauren-girlie

You're the color of the sky reflected in each store-front window pane ...
You're the whispering and the sighing of my tires in the rain.

J. Browne

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2003-10-27 11:26 PM

Lauren, I've been holding this back
for a poem.
Now, I know which one.

Hope you enjoy.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

11 posted 2003-10-28 08:15 AM

In silence    still --
  ocean blue --
sunsets -  jewels of      lonely skies

Edge walking      in thoughts  my own
I claim  all -  however painful, powerful,
                  truthful
manner of grace   long forgotten ticks

    Clocks  bleed    time
each fall   each echo
L~ your words always, always touch....deeply.