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On Writing Of Stone
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On Writing Of Stone |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Fumble Fingers finding keys to strike As words begin to tumble And the ache of hands too long with stone remains Impeding what would be said But you know they are just words That cascade in some ragged rumbling Jagged bite of edge alive Or somewhere Inside the parts that died And would be told As once upon a time If fairy tales could be And I An d I Still mumble the jointed lay of them That staggers one across the place Where two meet For strength is nothing But endurance of the clime Time will wear it all to sand When in the end Its just a clever rhyme Of sediment and lime This pain remains As with each passing hour Another shadow forms Against the offset face Still the leaves fall And there is grace In agonized Refrain of walls Built one weighted layer At a time By fingers searching for the way To say inside what it is You would love to say But it always seems the ache Gets in the way |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Still the leaves fall And there is grace In agonized Refrain of walls Built one weighted layer At a time By fingers searching for the way To say inside what it is You would love to say But it always seems the ache Gets in the way ~*~ Good morning, Cap'n. Seems you had a "weekend" of thinking. Glad you're sharing it with us. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
To say inside what it is You would love to say But it always seems the ache Gets in the way |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, Good one, enjoyed the rad. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
one of your best  enjoyed |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And the ache of hands too long with stone remains Impeding what would be said ================================== To say inside what it is You would love to say But it always seems the ache Gets in the way ================================= *smiling and shaking me mothy head* suddenly I feel naked.  So that was you peeking in my muse. ( Im taking this one for my own)  "I've still got sand in my shoes |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I cant tell you how simply amazing this piece is, you have taken parts of nature, and worked them into beautiful symbols some of sadness, and others of hope....BRAVO  Lauren~ Will the wind ever remember |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Still the leaves fall And there is grace In agonized Refrain of walls Built one weighted layer At a time By fingers searching for the way To say inside what it is You would love to say But it always seems the ache Gets in the way Absolutely beautiful, Capt. Ron, in a sad sort of way. You are an amazing writer, my friend.  Hugs  ethel |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"For strength is nothing But endurance of the clime Time will wear it all to sand When in the end Its just a clever rhyme Of sediment and lime" Sometimes I just don't know where it comes from... True brilliance. "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
There you go... making me want to spend time inside your head again! Wonderful write Captain... Much enjoyed. Hugs~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron "Still the leaves fall And there is grace In agonized Refrain of walls Built one weighted layer At a time By fingers searching for the way To say inside what it is You would love to say But it always seems the ache Gets in the way" Deep with meaning, dear friend....touching a place in me that understands. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
The symbols you use, the depth, and the emotion bring this to a masterpiece. Crystal |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Still the leaves fall And there is grace In agonized Refrain of walls Built one weighted layer At a time By fingers searching for the way To say inside what it is You would love to say But it always seems the ache Gets in the way It does indeed... but didn't here... this expresses so much... and does so superbly. *S* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is what i call a "mood poem" thanks for the mood |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Combative in a very quiet, gentle sort of way. Wow, how do you do that???? Like I said before, Otherworldy. WOW! Love, Terri~  |
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