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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2003-10-19 10:43 AM

You were there, among the daisies
as petals bloomed the morn in dew.
Eyes enchanting, sparkling with delight,
lips filled with a nectar for which
I thirst.

My senses flip-flop and flip again
as the fragrance of you wafts over me.
How might a man not so strongly
desire the winner’s prize, when
such is dangled so delightfully
before lusting eyes?

And, when my trek takes me, leaves me
alone in my own heart, I grieve.
For I love you, though I leave you.
And eternity is too vast a time
to cast petals to the waters of our
spring’s well.

As I shall walk, tearfully walk, into shadows
of what has become our day.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2003-10-19 10:59 AM

Barry
A beautiful read, You have walked a long walk into poetry.

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

2 posted 2003-10-19 11:09 AM

Barry...I was pondering something yesterday brought on by another song...this time it was Todd Rungren. You splendidly reorganized my thoughts in Magnus tradition. I am left peaceful by this poem as now fragmented regret no longer exists in my mind. You probably have no idea what I am talking about here...just know, I loved this poem and you helped me more than you will ever know.

Patricia

NewEnglandlazurlu
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

3 posted 2003-10-19 04:28 PM

Hi Barry, I love the ease and flow with which you write your words. This was so smooth and I enjoyed it very much.

Huggles, Marti

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

4 posted 2003-10-19 04:32 PM

This was silky and smooth.Only written with your talent and grace.

Crystal

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2003-10-19 08:06 PM

Magnus~
I don't know if you know just how moving some of your writes are ... this is one that whispers over and over again~
Beautiful, sir~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
[email protected]

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2003-10-20 12:13 PM

I know this ache... and while those precious moments are more than worth any pain... that walk away is to despise legs capable of motion. *S*

Beautiful write!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

7 posted 2003-10-20 12:15 PM

"As I shall walk, tearfully walk, into shadows of what has become our day."

*sigh*

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2003-10-20 12:54 PM

so sad

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2003-10-20 01:19 PM

Very moving Barry.
This piece flowed like a gentle mountain stream.
Love this keeper...sure do.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

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