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Old_Shoe_New_Laces Junior Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 31 |
In infants it was tested that if language is inverted or spoken incorrectly, it will not be recorded in the cortex of the brain, but when spoken correctly, the first synapses promoting thought are made. So what does this say about: poetry language silence A gurgling brook at dawn. A rainbow trout leaping to catch a mayfly in its jaws. Is it the slapping of the surface? And what word then from a mayfly first having only one day to live. Silence you say is like depression. A stillborn child will hear nothing will feel nothing. So what then do you make of the voice in the wind, in the sound of a few dry leaves blown across the pavement. If you watch cornstalks before a storm, you will find them stretching their leaves to the sky, exposing their underbellies. The cricket would tell you if you permit, when frost will first arrive. You have not been watching. You have not been listening. Whosoever might steal the song from a songbirds throat, make note for note a cadence. With tongues like tulips, stamen to pistil, pistil to stamen, dancing couples know when and how to step. A mother will wake at night attending to her child before hearing the first cry. You worry too much. When it rains those who have been shot will experience muffled pain, just as a man whose arm was amputated will reach out to grab a glass from the counter with what is no longer there. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I enjoyed your Providing introspections, OSNL...  |
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Old_Shoe_New_Laces Junior Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 31 |
Thanks for the comment. It has been a long time since I was here last. Whatever happened to the adult sections? I have some poetry I would have posted there being it is of mature content, but that ability seems lost now. Are you allowed to post those poems on this forum. I am perplexed. So this is what happens when you take a long leave of absence. Ha... Thanks again. Ciao |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
B.A., all I can say is that I wish I could have written this. I'm grateful that you did. Our forums were down for a few days. If you go to Mature Content, you will be able to post in Insights. Ron is bringing up the remaining forums as time [and recovery] is allowed. We're so glad to have you back again! [This message has been edited by Lady In White (10-20-2003 09:33 AM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OldShoe~ This is a wonderful write~ Layered and a ponderer ... I like that~ Gonna share it with some others and see if we can get it the reads it deserves~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
OSNL I really enjoyed this thought filled poem! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Bravo. I did so enjoy this. Excellent! Patricia |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A lot to think about here... presented very well. *S* I enjoyed! *S* |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is absolutely beautiful! A wonderful write! So pleased to see you back in the blue pages. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Marty Baird Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 90Georgia, U.S. |
Nice job with great examples |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
This is very interesting and thought provoking. I will have to read it again I know! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Old_Shoe_New_Laces "thumbsup: Enjoyed. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
 This was great.Glad you're back. Crystal |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
OSNL this is so very beautiful, I don’t get in here as often as I should, but just occasionally someone whispers into my ear that there’s a particularly beautiful piece illuming the board. I’m glad I came and listened to the whisper of wonder that is this superb poem as always Mushy   Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This poem is remarkable...it certainly brings the mind to a lot of thought.. and I think your pen name is super! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Very well done leaving one with much to ponder. Welcome back to the pages of blue. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
I am grateful that someone shared your poem with me. But more so, I am grateful that you wrote it. It is filled with much to think about and in my humble opinion, a poem that brings delight or makes one want to read it again and again, is a brilliantly written piece. Thank you! Hugs, Marti Hear Blessings dropping their blossoms all around you. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
I love movies that are psycological thrillers, and this felt a little like that. A bit Hitchcockian, but not in a freakish way...just that feel of psycological edge..digging into the psyche! WOW. Love, Terr~  |
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Old_Shoe_New_Laces Junior Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 31 |
Wow, I really didn't expect this much of a response on the poem. Thank you all for your kind words. I was unsure of the poem myself. I suppose one does not always have the best outlook over his/her own poetry. I have been quite busy with papers and exams... university life. I will try to come around to comment more when I get the time. Once again, thank you. |
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Betty Senior Member
since 2002-08-13
Posts 1159Virginia |
I loved reading this. Betty |
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