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Brittle . . . . . . . . . Senryu
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Brittle . . . . . . . . . Senryu |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Again I shatter, my clay brittle from the fire. Far better to melt.... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
All I can say is well done! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
It's better to burn out than to fade away... -Kurt Cobain  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...This is a good one...the kind that makes you say, wow. Wow! |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
awesome, very clever |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ Soooo, inspiring~ Just a deep ponderer~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I would have to agree |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh! WOW!! ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
i adore the poem but the question of whether to break or melt recalls Neil Young's '..better to burn out then to fade away' and i'm not quite sure what to think |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Hmmm...second person who's said something like that.... and it's true. I'd much rather be a meteor than a compost pile...... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Damn, I relate. A brilliant senryu. I'm saving this~ Melissa Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
WOW!!!I've felt this way a 1,000 times.Wonderfully done. Crystal |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Ed, I feel this way ever so much, sweet friend, I nknow if I burn to ashes my dust is still there, but to fade nothing seems reminiscent! (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ed, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
After reading the responses, I had to go back and read the poem again... and I'll agree that a meteor definitely sounds better than a compost pile if those are the choices presented for one's destiny. (though it does make me wonder if all those wishes I've made on falling stars were to whoms, not whats. *G*) But if one is to be melted in arms of passion... or consumed by the conflagration of anger leaving only shards? *G* Give me melt! LOL Excellent write... I hope I interpreted the sad undercurrents incorrectly. *S* |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I would choose a slow melt down any day, opposed to being shattered to pieces. Nice write Rat~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Good Jobber! Good day to you...wishing you happy trials/sails.....  |
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