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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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In thirty-six days I’ll be a day older Than you ever were I never considered you My role model, but I’ll have none then. Nothing to watch, see And know it’s not me. There are some who say I have your face I guess they don’t know I can’t seem to erase Explosions of anger Distortions from displeasure Never good enough glares So seldom a smile. But perhaps there would be A certain form of justice If the child you called ugly Became your mirror. If time had been kinder Would you have stopped Grieving all I’m not And enjoyed what I am? I know what formed you But we can make choices Not repeat wrongs done to us Commit to break the cycle Make sure good memories Sit side by side with Times of work and struggle Leave lessons, not bruises. I doubt we’d be friends But I wish we'd been given Opportunity to know And a chance to ask why. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) No child in my heart is ever ugly, and surely I would hate personally to have someone else's face or complexion because then behind the papier-mache you can never discover the justifications why! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs your way, sweet friend, this is a deep and heartfelt write, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Suthern, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern, Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There are some who say I have your face I guess they don’t know I can’t seem to erase Explosions of anger Distortions from displeasure Never good enough glares So seldom a smile. But perhaps there would be A certain form of justice If the child you called ugly Became your mirror. ========================== oh damn .......... *heavy sigh* "ponderings" is too gentle of a word for expressions that knock the wind out of the reader... but then thats the way it should be when we write from places so deep. (yktiktykik)  |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Oh -- rending! Sometimes we grow by watching and changing ourselves to match an exemplary person, and sometimes we grow by watching and changing ourselves because we see that person for what they are. This heartbreak is one that can't be outgrown, but it can be mastered, and in this excellent poem you show how. Well done. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Suthern...Written from a place that needed expressing...I'm glad you did!  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Thank you...I know I am not alone. You could have dedicated this to me, and I wonder now how many others. You set free a few tears that needed release. Patricia |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
M'toe: Your heart is so kind... I thank you! *S* Seymour: You're good to me... thank you! *S* JM: You're right. *S* But the filters would have zapped a more accurate title. *G* Thank you so much. *S* Jamie: I learned from a friend. *S* So if this passes that insight on along, I'm truly grateful... Thank you so much! *S* Martie: I wish that place would hush! LOL Thank you! Patricia: This is one I almost didn't post... and then nearly deleted once it was posted... I'm not real comfortable with its existence. *S* So knowing it meant something to you helps me tremendously... I thank you! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
yes I will agree with Martie, the best poems come from that place inside that just begs to be freed...and this is one of the best...hugs my friend |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
wow, powerful stuff... i think that it's brainless to assume that making changes to your window's view will gain a new perspective. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh, this touched my heart, sweet suthern lady.... all of it did, so I won't even pick a part to quote. Goodness, I know this one hurt for you to write. I love you, my friend. Hugs to you  Ethel |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Sad life circumstances come, seemingly at random...and certainly to good people at least as often as to bad ones. Sometimes though, it goes when we make it go. I have confidence in you: you'll overcome it, if anybody ever did. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
jellybeans: Thank you, my friend... I'm glad you liked... though I still think I'd poof that place into non-existence if I could... I keep trying. *S* mytuesdaywishes: Thank you very much! *S* garysgirl: It did. *S* Thank you, sweet lady... your loving heart is truly a gift in my life. Ratleader: I have the best help imaginable. *S* Most of the power is gone... even visits aren't as tough... and sleep is no longer an invitation for reliving. *S* For that, I'm eternally grateful. *S* Thank you so much, my friend. *S* |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
if we only knew the answers... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are a fabulous poetess, Ms. suthern. The angst in this pulls at my heart strings, and the questions left unanswered left me somewhat unraveled. This is pure poetry in my book!!! Peace to you sweet lady~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*melancholic sigh* |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
not sure I grasp the meaning behind this...but the feeling is not lost on me hugss M |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
good thoughts, enjoyable read. Hugs. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernGal~ Just hugs~ ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Girl, I read this a few days ago, and darned if I know where my answer was. Perhaps it's still resting inside me, because this hit me as hard on the second read as it did the first. I know these feelings, and I know why you write them. I'm proud of you. Now, response, set in stone. Or in blue. Which has been known to poof. LOL... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
There is not a day goes by I don't ask at least one of these questions myself, and each time they hurt, as there is simply no answer. One trick is putting it away in a place where it feels "comfortable", and bringing it out on a day it doens't like you have done here with such a heartfelt write. The other trick is breaking the chain - which I know you have also done by who you are, and let me tell you I for one think you are one of the most beautiful people that crossed my life's path. Know that you are not alone as I too know this painful memory. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Edder: Yes... if only. *S* Thank you so much! Blues: I like your book, kind lady! *S* Thank you so much! *S* PS: Thank you! nakdthoughts: Thank you for reading! *S* vandana: Thank you! GS: I'm glad you liked... thank you! Marge: Hugs are always welcome. *S* Thank you! Sunshine: Believe it or not... I am, too. *S* Thank you so much... especially for the second read. *S* Mysteria: I know you do... and I thank you for a response that touches my heart... I've already printed it. *S* |
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