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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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Today Like most days Lately Finds me struggling To piece together a coherent thought using the shards of previous attempts Trying to fashion The shells and pebbles from shores, barely visited and broken crystal from toasts, long forgotten Into some semblance of self-portrait But this like all mosaics Is a thing best seen From Afar |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ed... tend to enjoy your words..but not agree with your conclusion.. the picture..in its entire form may bes tbe seen from a distance IF the only thing one looks for is the overall image... to see how it is formed and what formed it..the bit of color the texture, the shadows..one has to get very close..and peer with not only the immediate view in mind..but what we saw from a distance. I think you are perhaps a bit hard on the image you think you see... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Ack! Ron dude, this is just something that comes over me from time to time...Lol You could say, another of those "passing" things. Thanks for calling me on my own BS. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Don't we sometimes need to step back, to see if what we are isn't all together, after all? You are both right...in my own, quite humble, and uniquely individual, opinion.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) Sunshine..you stay out of this..lol... Ed... you know I love ya man... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
you guys crack me up . . . Ed? what Ron said is perfect sense yes and you are wayy too tough on yourself but? you wouldnt be you if you werent you know? I stand back and with a keen eye continue to walk closer . . . the closer I get the clearer the image *smile* I adore your writing makes me look at myself (stop doing that!) *laughing* Baby? the finished piece is just as it should be . . . xxoo |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent...much enjoyed the read. Hugs~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...this one made me think of all the small pieces of us...that need to be appreciated...was just looking at my hand...and thinking that...and the thoughts, sometimes they are so big, that a small one is somehow all that we can take-in at one time. Hugs! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ed, Your contemplation a sensation, enjoyed. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Pout.  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Superb! Your writing continues to amaze me! Never stop! Corinne |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You have a keen, keen eye, Ed! Ed ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Kaz Junior Member
since 2003-10-12
Posts 26 |
I like your style of writing. I think most of us view each other from afar, but I think we all should take a step closer to also view the detail. There's too much to miss from afar. Kaz |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
"Old style Wranx" indeed! You know I love this. ~Tier |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Sometimes the smallest things need notice.  Crystal |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
To piece together a coherent thought using the shards of previous attempts I like the entire poem... think the views from both close and afar have their merits. *S* But these lines particularly appealed... maybe because I see me there. *S* Excellent! |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Wranx, I enjoyed your poem. We all have moments of being to close and standing back can provide among other things, relief, better perspective, and the ability to even catch one's own BS (though I do not buy that..  )Like your style.. SG [This message has been edited by SimplyGold (10-17-2003 06:20 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Ed?...agreeing with Sue here... much too hard on yourself, my friend... And this?...yes...made me think... and take a look at ME...scary stuff...grin Hugs, you...  When the power of love overcomes the |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes indeed |
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PouringJewels Member
since 2003-09-18
Posts 158Maryland |
Ed, I can't tell you how many times I have watched you from afar. You always seemed to have it in control. Maybe that was what you wanted to express. By the way I got some old writings out of the closet like you asked me to do. I posted one on 10/19/03. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
As always Ed your writing is brilliant and relatable. Of course I see much pain here and yet also a bit of hope, then again, maybe since I relate so much, I only force myself to see hope. Nonetheless, I wish I could write like you. You (and Raph) write 'dark' with such eloquence and strength. I'm saving this~ Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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