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The Black of Sea
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The Black of Sea |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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Paint stripe of tiger. Woven silk fiber.. be starving love...hunger, dried and tender. from touch.. humiliation. A desert sleeps, cold, void of moon. An ocean wave screams, half empty. Jade stone, pull gravitationally, you sting upward on a downfall of spine. Thicken water, blood made divine. Defy the laws of physics, mistrust the sprain of mind. Be aware, this wick may seem to burn slowly..as a second wind falls lightly on fingertips aflame. You must watch the distinctive lines falter, as speed of tiger.. abducts the black of sea. [This message has been edited by Kaoru (09-23-2003 01:15 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You write with the eye of a visual artist. The stripes of tiger lended nicely to the perspective of waves and this? "An ocean wave screams, half empty." I could SEE a curled paw, nail out reaching. nice nice stuff lady. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Meg, you have made me a part of the sea here missy An ocean wave screams, half empty. I HEARD that . . . beautiful metaphors beautiful writing xxoo |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Thicken water, blood made divine. Defy the laws of physics, mistrust the sprain of mind. Your heart is most certainly persusive in your words and nothing will ever defy the gravity of your strength...your soul divine Very much enjoyed, awesome write lady Good Morning! |
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gringakiwi Member
since 2003-08-05
Posts 189 |
Kaoru Awesome imagery well done Connie |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
black of sea, liquid stone and message chalk written, haze and scream to signal to beckon to melt away erm...yeah. don't ask were it came from. singsongy voice "meg's going insane..." which is good. the more insane, the better they write  And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Um, did you really say once that I outshine you? It's not even a contest here. The winner: Meg! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Meghan~ This has rich artistic beauty etched all through it~ 'Be aware, this wick may seem to burn slowly..as a second wind falls lightly on fingertips aflame. You must watch the distinctive lines falter, as speed of tiger.. abducts the black of sea.' Compelling read~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...!!! Eric |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Meghan...hm...I thought I had replied to this one. Well...I guess I'll do it now...smile. I really did enjoy this one...very much so. It's so well penned and what with me being a tiger lover, those references definitely got my attention. VERY nicely done, my friend...  When the power of love overcomes the |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Ne stopevous pas du write...sorry been watching Pepe LePueux..le pant le gasp |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Meghan, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I just love your sense of imagery as I too saw the zebra-like stripes grace the scenery and the waves crest upward! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Meghan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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