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blowing bangs |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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little ghosts and tiny feet wrinkled in the bath Hitler is a mighty queen hands on hips she's Italy swanking at age six I see scrubbing her tenacity blowing bangs in exhaled sigh pounding wrath upon the gleam bubbles bursted by a child... folding fingers one by one (is this the way?) that finger hums a soldier's dirge salute-- tell me where do lingers stray tell me tales of absolute signs of fish fast drawn in sand-- quickly it is swept away remembered with a nod--astute-- scribe within a veil. Wells in pool circle-eyes dwells in olives hypnotized little girl and mommy's dead-- daddy's just a dream she dreamt-- and fairy tales are fancy lies... little ghosts and tiny feet-- she kissed them just like momma did and told each toe that they'd been bad... blowing bangs too short for this. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (10-15-2003 04:35 AM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"little ghosts and tiny feet-- she kissed them just like momma did and told each toe that they'd been bad... blowing bangs too short for this." Something like this could kill a yeti! Lubs ya witch! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
serenity, moving writing....very moving. well done gal! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
folding fingers one by one (is this the way?) that finger hums a soldier's dirge salute-- tell me where do lingers stray tell me tales of absolute signs of fish fast drawn in sand-- quickly it is swept away remembered with a nod--astute-- scribe within a veil. you always move me witch... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This one shook me a bit dear. Very strong imagery, well written. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Serenity this is going to haunt my thoughts for the rest of the day. I suppose it achieved its purpose. What powerful imagery to have penned. Well done indeed. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
folding fingers one by one (is this the way?) that finger hums a soldier's dirge salute-- tell me where do lingers stray tell me tales of absolute signs of fish fast drawn in sand-- quickly it is swept away remembered with a nod--astute-- scribe within a veil. ================================= the word play, internal rhymes and assonance of that verse make me smile at you... poetry just comes out of you.  and add an alliterated title and Im moth giddy. lol  bout time you posted something. yayaya  dont say it... lol ( muse? whats that) heh every time I talk to you its over too soon |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Powerful thoughts here Ser. God I love where your muse takes you. Love ya lady! Hugs~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Karen? somehow I see the eyes that belong beneath those bangs Lady . . .  xxoo |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity....You just touch so easily...with a half turn from the corner of an eye. Hugs! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
great! "swanking at the age of six"--i know what you mean... Sadelite |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen?...I don't even have the words... Feeling this one... Hugs, you...  When the power of love overcomes the |
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