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Open Poetry #29

Dark Pitch Black

D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

0 posted 2003-10-14 09:47 PM

Dark pitch black
light bleached white
checkerboard square
shades in between
steaming hot red
chilled frozen blues
topical paradises
hating moments lost
loving feelings found
emotions rejuvenated,
all the colors
tearing you apart
till all time ends.
D.Lester Young
Somewhere in America not on company time 10/14/03

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

1 posted 2003-10-15 01:12 PM

all the colors
tearing you apart
till all time ends''

Indeed what a truth...well written Sir...
Lauren~

Will the wind ever remember
the names it has blown in the past
with its crutch, its old age, and its
wisdom it whispers no this won't be the last

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

2 posted 2003-10-15 10:47 PM

Hello, D. Lester,
   I gotta tell ya I liked your poem.   The more I read it, the more I see in it.   I really like your CONTRASTS! "Dark pitch black
Light Bleached white"  (This reminds me that black is the absence of color and white is the presence of all colors.  Maybe that's a little how we feel sometimes, absent of liveliness or full of life's colors.)  Oh, I really liked the part about the checkboard squares--kind of like the keys on a piano (have to have both to play a song/game!)
   "steaming hot red
    chilled frozen blues"
That picture reads loud and clear!  Enjoyed your write!
                    Sadelite

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