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Add A Crystal To The Cloud
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Add A Crystal To The Cloud |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
How can you ignore The nape of the forest's neck, Protecting, curling around Three sides of the pond, Alive with cheery beings Floating through the water... And see those two fish? Over there in the corner? They're kissing! And... You called it stupid. But, see over there? How the sun breaks Through the clouds In a perfect stream Of beaming light... It makes one think of their Creator, I remarked. "I don't believe in a creator," You say As if the word had bitten Your perfect tongue. Yes, but... When we step back Far back, like this... And take it all in as one scene, One breath-taking, word-stealing scene... Does it not immediately make your lungs Fill with air? Does your heart and soul not swell Close to bursting? Does your face not take on a wistful smile, And a twinkle in your eye Add a crystal to the clouds? "No." But... Why not?? I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome imagery! You took me there! love the ending! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thanks Dixie!!!!!  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I do believe this is nice...and I do believe in a creator...James |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
 Thank you James! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
KoKo ~ I truly enjoy every single piece of poetry of yours that I have had the pleasure of reading.   EA |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Aaaaaaaaaw EA!!!!! That has got to be THE NICEST compliment I've ever gotten about my poetry!!!! Aaaaaw, if I didn't see it before, I see now why your sn is "Earth Angel" You most certainly are an Angel in our midst, here on PIP, and I'm damned glad to have ya here   !!!!!! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Koko~ I really, really enjoyed this writing and the questions it envoked...thank you. Susan "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
KoKo~ A very pleasurable read~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There are those that see... and those that never will. Thank God for YOUR eyes! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Susan, Always a pleasure...Thank YOU for the compliment |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Marge, Thanks muchly! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Sunshine, Thank you!!!! I think you may just be that ray of sunshine I was talking about...  lol |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
KoKo ~ If you can write like this at your age, I cannot even imagine the great writes that will be spilling from your pen in later years!   EA |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
"In a perfect stream Of beaming light..." Lauren, it's good to see YOU beaming again! I think this may be your best yet! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lauren, this is SOOOOO beautiful. I'm keeping it. Hope you don't mind.  Hugs Ethel |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Linda, Thanks!! I really appreciate it |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Eddles, Where are you tonight?? Thanks hun...but you've said that before  |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Ethel, Of course I don't mind sweety!!! I'm flattered  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) Oh Lauren, it saddens me so deeply to see many cynics and skeptics in our world and fail to recognize the beauty that others see! (sad sigh) I pray someday the world will be without cynics and skeptics and together we can see the crystals and sugar-coated clouds of the heavens and the beauty of nature all around, yay, God Bless You, this is precious, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Revisiting...this is from the heart...James |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
exellent, enjoyed this one |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thanks Noah I agree James: Thanks!!!!!! I love it when I get a revisit...gives me an ego boost, lol pandonov: Thank ya I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Smile are you sure which one to be up there great to read makes the mind run arround abit, for a simple translating dane lol. Smile Jes |
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