Open Poetry #29 |
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Lightning Eyes |
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PsychoticBunni Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162Mythical Atlantis |
ummm ok this is actually a song that i wrote for a guy and it sounds much better when it's sung so bear with me on this one okay? Lightning Eyes I hear it raining on my roof I think of you I hear it pouring when I lie in bed I dream of you I hear the thunder when I look outside I’m holding you I see the lightning when I look into your eyes I love you And the thunder, the lightning All of it scares me so But I’m in your arms tonight And I’m safe From the rain Your arms are a harbor in the sea, my dear Your face is the sun peeking through the stormclouds Your eyes are a lighthouse beacon Beckoning me into your care It tells me you love me Meg- And the Texan pushed the Mexican out of the plane and screamed, "Long live the ALAMO!!!!!!!!!" |
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Local Parasite![]()
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
The alternating lines at the beginning work well with the sound of this... I don't really have a lot of constructive commentary to offer, because I don't really know anything about songwriting, but I do like your imagery and the parallel you draw between your subject matter and your symbolism... Thanks for sharing. Parasite Faith is a fine invention |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your arms are a harbor in the sea, my dear Your face is the sun peeking through the stormclouds Your eyes are a lighthouse beacon Beckoning me into your care I like this very much... especially since I'm longing for certain arms, face and eyes. *S* |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Such sweet love...one that's a haven. A safe haven in life's stormy weather doesn't hurt, either. Very nice. Loved this! ![]() Love, Terri~ ![]() Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Storms are my most favorite-ist thingie in the world...Why would you want to hide from it? ![]() No, but really, this is sweet...like a little baby turtle meeting her mate for the first time...O_o... Forgive me, I've had no sleep. |
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