Open Poetry #29 |
Soar The Night, Dreamer's Flight |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Oh, but to feel the touch, His hand upon the soar of highest light. To see the vision, clear and planned, to feel it’s all....just right. To taste the wine of water’s flow. To rake the leaves of Autumn crest. To let one’s mind simply know the journey won, in lonely quest. To live and breath the pure clear air and take the life into the haze. As one might seem to softly share of waking thoughts, of wanting days. If but one must, and must one will be led the path of cobblestone. Might one then hear the warbled trill as on the trek, one feels alone. For in the day of waning light a voice shall come into the mind. A voice to guide a journey’s flight, a whispered sight before one’s blind. [This message has been edited by Magnus (10-12-2003 12:18 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, "lonely quest." from your poem is a good title. Enjoyed |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
I'm not sure about a title, but you have certainly taken me to "peace of mind" |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Sy, a good thought...I will let the candle burn and see what comes of this. Edder, yes, does me as well....must have been a subliminal thing, cause I just let the words fall onto the page....not knowing where I was headed... but now I see it was very clear... Thanx |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Amazing....I soared spiritually through these words. The feeling I get from this poem is on of a wish "To See Clearly The Plan" I love the way your words flowed into my soul. BRAVO!!!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"To rake the leaves of Autumn crest" what a beautiful write! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Hi Karen....your words always light softly upon me. Hope you are well. thanx dear one. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Kacy, thanx....you picked a good one.... yet, I will still leave it open for thought. We'll see what we build from this. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Ooooohhhhh...I have an idea...how about: "A Journey's Flight.....A Whisper's Sight" (big hugggssssssss) No matter what title you choose, this is a wonderful poem that spills with pure willpower! (smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Excellent Noah....good choice....let's water the field a little longer....Thanx. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ LOVE the all of it~ Suggest- Of Waking Thoughts *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
It is such a joy to read your rhyme once again. I have been writing only free verse (that is when I do write...never enough hours in the day.) I wanted to write today...rhyme, in fact, but every attempt was fruitless. OK, enough about me! A suggestion for a title: "One Guiding Voice" or just drop the "one"..."Guiding Voice" A lovely write, Barry. Enjoyed this so much this evening and you spoke to many of the thoughts I had throughout this day. Patricia |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ahhh, Patricia, you too have given me a great choice to use for a title of this small and humble expression. Mayhaps I should flip a coin? Nahhhhh, too crude. Straws? Sticks? Toothpicks? OK, I give for now.... tanx Kid... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Silky...James |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Such eminence in the words you worked. So very good Barry. |
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