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Movement #5 in A sharp memory |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I don’t know where the empty goes When I think about your smile But is disappears again For at least a little while ......................................... Along the shore last night Small waves from the almost still wind Were capped with touches of moonstone Reflected off the sky and left To ride on the skin of each ripple Until in break They shattered on stone And fragments of the light Eaten by greedy darkness as it sat Shadow hunched With bared teeth Trying to reign supreme… But held at bay by Luna’s Scheme To pull tides from oceans and shed the softer Light of day back on blind men Like me… Who would curse from time to time The arrogance of her smile And yet would give a last gasp of breath To see it if denied I cannot hold the night’s allure In words that in flat fold of line seem only To speak to the edges of her vast beauty And are melded into the dunes of other words That shaped by the waves and tides become subject To the wind and it eroding grain by grain What was seen or felt And break, with shattered shards on stones Of yet another shore .............................................. I can’t tell you how or when The agony found an end But its plain to me From you I may never mend Though the silence still runs deep And I find the memories I keep I don’t have the daily pain Of not seeing you again ‘cause I don’t know where the empty goes When I think about your smile But is disappears again For at least a little while ........................................ My love… The moon waltzed last night Before it broke apart in waves That reminded me Tides are born somewhere [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (10-10-2003 03:28 PM).] |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I already told you.... Just wanted to save.. Susan |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Lyrical, captain. Beautifully said. ~Tier |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
"I don’t know where the empty goes When I think about your smile But is disappears again For at least a little while" such amazingly powerful words. I felt this before and then.. "I can’t tell you how or when The agony found an end But its plain to me From you I may never mend Though the silence still runs deep And I find the memories I keep I don’t have the daily pain Of not seeing you again" This is what I'm waiting for. Because I'm still somewhere between the smile and the end of the pain. So amazing. I love to read your work! While your words always taste so nice, this one speaks to me more than usual. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Along the shore last night Small waves from the almost still wind Were capped with touches of moonstone Reflected off the sky and left To ride on the skin of each ripple Until in break They shattered on stone ------- I cannot hold the night’s allure In words that in flat fold of line seem only To speak to the edges of her vast beauty And are melded into the dunes of other words That shaped by the waves and tides become subject To the wind and it eroding grain by grain What was seen or felt And break, with shattered shards on stones Of yet another shore .............................................. I can’t tell you how or when The agony found an end But its plain to me From you I may never mend -------- I don’t know where the empty goes When I think about your smile But is disappears again For at least a little while ........................................ My love… The moon waltzed last night Before it broke apart in waves That reminded me Tides are born somewhere ===================== *touching the screen* thank you for the rhyme....(ykikyk)   ~~~~  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
This was awesome, I'm speechless and that's saying a mouthful for me. This was Venus, Life, Paradise, God all wrapped up into one. Would you mind if I print and keep, I'm a water girl, who loves the sea. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This was so beautiful. Made me smile. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
(my turn) Damn.... Just damn. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...words that in flat fold of line seem only To speak to the edges of her vast... ~*~ All of the master musicians are smiling down on you... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Susan...lol... thank you.. I told you as well, you are easily impressed...  Tier my friend..from you the words mean much..thank you endlessechoe... echoe..echoe... echoe.. oh wait I got carried away with the name...  thank you JM... just a bar trick kid... want to bet a hundred I can't do it again? same theme? different verse?? huh? Hey... come on.. put your money down...man has got to make aliving somehow you know... (hugs my friend) Lee... you speechless?? oh my Goooooodddddnneeesssss..... LOL sure you can save or print... and thank you fo rthe nice words.. Loner... hey.. glad I could add a smile to your day!! Nancy... then we are even..though yours deserved it much more than mine.... Sunshine..I swear I heard Mozart groan at that line...if they are looking down my friend they are laughing..and at least I might have amused them... thank you and thank you all... for taking time to read and comment... much appreciated..... |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
This is really a beautiful piece of artwork from your pen!!!! I must say that as a musician, the title just reached out and grabbed me, and am glad that it did!! Very much appreciated your work here...~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~S~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ron, great write, almost got a smile out of me....wait, that was supposed to be a grumble? Right? Thanx for the comment.... Hang in there, one of these days you too will be classified as a "fossil".... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Oh Ron, this is wonderful, sweet friend, this made me smile as so many of your wonderful words do, that waltz and ebb! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
quote: *** quote: sheesh! what exquisite tantalizing imagery  what an honor to share the same forum with you |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I can’t tell you how or when The agony found an end But its plain to me From you I may never mend Though the silence still runs deep And I find the memories I keep I don’t have the daily pain Of not seeing you again Oh boy, you really did it this time. Thank you for this gentle roll of words. You turn the tide in such a way. Love the calm you leave in my heart, Cpat. *applause* |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Tides are indeed born somewhere, Cap'n... I like your instrospective verse... |
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