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Once, Upon Our Star
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Once, Upon Our Star |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Standing there, hands in my pockets as a tear gently wound it’s way to my stubbled chin... Wondering, in spite of the sob that grows closer to my lips, quivering as the taste of a tender kiss still touches my tongue. The chill of night, as flurries whisk by. Bringing a run to a reddish nose. A sniff to the lingering sigh. A blush to the cheek now cooling... A yearn to a heart pulling slowly away into the mist of reality. Our moon, setting slowly, wandering into the night upon a bed of stars. I still hum those bars of a song that was sung many eves upon the embrace of you enwrapped in my arms.... I await the dawn once more, that light might gleam upon the reflection of you. And as I huddle, there beside that street lamp, upon our corner of lover’s earth....I shall count the dwindling stars....till once again a star shines within my eyes.... of you... |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
you wont get criticism from me on this it was excellent We do away with your kind...I am war I am pain I am all you've ever slein I am tears in your eyes I am truth I am lies. Dimmu Borgir |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...*Sigh*...  |
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PoetryAngel013 New Member
since 2003-10-09
Posts 7 |
Wow. All I can say is, Wow. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
How do you do this? *sigh* Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
indeed sir indeed....softly beautiful... Lauren~ There's a song inside my soul |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Barry Your words were exceptional and absolutely exquisite. You always make my heart melt. "Love.......bittersweet, irrepressible - loosens the limbs and I tremble" Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
When you write like this, even the mist of the cool evening beads the page. Excellent art. TD |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
What beautiful, beautiful words. WOW! Makes me want to walk up behind you, and whisper...don't be sad, or I will cry with you, and the ice will melt...then what?.. Do we just slide home 'cause it's so slippery? Just had to say something to cheer you. This was so sad.  Love, Terri~  Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! [This message has been edited by SharaRose (10-10-2003 12:12 AM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Barry, such beautiful, beautiful writing, even if it is so sad. Isn't it good to be home? I missd you, my friend. It's good to see you here.  Hugs  Ethel |
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allamericanjoe Member
since 2003-10-02
Posts 116Iredell county, NC |
Truly a beautiful write. Amazing that pain is the catalyst for such beautiful creations as this. Loved it!! "The secret of life is enjoying the passage of time" ~James taylor~ |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
sweet and so romantic |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
BRAVO!!!!BRAVO!!!BRAVO!!!!!  Crystal |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
call me Mr Smooth will ya?? LOL kind of like the kettle calling the pot names isn't it??? start calling you barry White of poetry land bud... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Oh Barry, this is sad but beautiful, sweet friend, in the bed of stars may you always see those two clusters, brighter than Sirius, always twinkling, a celestial Chesire cat always guiding you with fond memories! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is lovely, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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