Open Poetry #29 |
And The Sandman Said / Sandman |
froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
The first poem here I had written and sent over to my friend EvocativeVerse2 who brought it up a notch. Thank-you my friend. The second version is the first poem EvocativeVerse2 and I did together. And The Sandman Said.... The sandman said .... Come to me on this night and we'll travel throughout, Explore the dream of adventures already dreamt. And the sandman said.... come to me on this night, I'll sing you a lullaby of songs so warm and sweet as you drift off to sleep. For tomorrow it too awaits. - E. J. Griswold Sandman The Sandman The Sandman said unto me, "Come this night. We'll wander conjointly through dreamland." His words bestowed the craft of second sight, I knew for certain that I'd take his hand. Then he whispered, "Let's pursue hopes unknown," And in a twinkling I'd forsaken my bed, Upon the winds of bedlam I was blown-- --In a place where reverie's moored by thread. Oh the rarities perceived, the jolt, the awe, 'Tis impossible to describe the love, I saw a kingdom that was without flaw, And delights I'd never even thought of. 'Twas then the morning sun caressed my face, And woefully I slipped from his embrace. - E. J.Griswold and K. R. Middleton Aka Froggyand EvocativeVerse2 |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
wow, I like both versions. Very well done. I wish the sandman would come and visit me! Seems he had his hands full last night though. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done... would seem the two of you indeed found the same dream(s) to write of.... I enjoyed! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
I love it all!! Most enjoyable read, and well written by both of you...~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~S~ |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Thank-you all for the wonderful comments. The sandman doesn't come for me though. Thank-you all again. :-) |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh E.J and K.R, this is a most gorgeous duet, sweet friends, the ending is bittersweet but the whole dream experience here is scintillating! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You Both, sweet friends, yay, we all love you so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet E.J and K.R, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you both! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very beautifully written! And a lovely duet indeed. I am about to surrender to the Sandman's song ... Love, Margherita |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
I like both versions...:-) Very nice indeed, well done Froggy and EV-2 >>>>ice<<<< |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
froggy and evocative...I enjoyed both these poems very much, especially the duet. |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Thank-you all for the sweet nice comments. Sweet dreams to all. :-) |
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