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ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2003-08-16 09:05 AM

Why are men moved
To serve opened petals?
(As tokens)
After love has been put
In a compromised position?
Fantastic,
As they are
How can those stemmed-bracts ease,
A woman's tear-burned lenses?
*
To find the answer,
We must go back....
Poor Adam did not understand,
Because he was the first man;
Full wonder of his Eve.
*
(The first Garden,
First argument
Adam walked away;
Feeling sorry was new to him)
*
Along his path
Grew perfumed flowers,
Drifting up their sweet.
Beauties, were they all
(and God-sent,clear)
That mocked
His lovely woman's face.
And picking them by hand
He learned, could heal
When mortal man,
Missed wide the lovers mark.
*
He found that buds on stems
(Displayed as gifts) Could change,
From frown (His mates) to smile
But only if, (warned God)
His sorrow was sincere.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2003-08-16 09:08 AM

I love this...very nicely penned.
~Summertime Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace~

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

2 posted 2003-08-16 09:47 AM

Sincerity will win. We can sense when something is not sincere. You are so right. This was full of deep thought. Loved it!

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2003-08-16 09:52 AM

ice

In the flowershop business, I have seen many a man get out of the doghouse with a flower and sincerity. Enjoyed your poem!

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

4 posted 2003-08-19 08:11 PM

Hey Captain Ice,
Just read your poem. You already know
what I think......
love it!!!!!

:-)

Froggy

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2003-08-20 01:45 AM

I got a real kick out of your poem and whenever I saw a man coming with flowers, it always intimidated me for some reason. Enjoyed this.

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

6 posted 2003-08-20 02:01 AM

Ahh..

here's a quote I remembered while reading this..

"The first chance Adam had, he laid the blame on Eve"..

Love the write..

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