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Martie

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0 posted 2003-08-15 01:20 PM

Heat Wave

In the cinnabar
the air curves
female in a silent request
of damp strands
yearning for wet sand
and the thunder of an ocean face
needing all her pieces
displaced

serenity blaze
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1 posted 2003-08-15 01:23 PM

I have certainly FELT heat before, but Martie? You allowed me to see it, hear it and taste it too. (And personified as a woman too. That made me smile wide.)

My my my, what a painter you are...

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2 posted 2003-08-15 01:35 PM

Yes -- that's exactly how heat looks when it feels like it feels there along the edge of your mountains....

I'm heading for the beach to sprawl on the sand and watch my grown-up kid play volleyball for money.... wanna come along?

...sorry, I admit it's petty cruelty even to ask that on a day like this!

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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

3 posted 2003-08-15 01:35 PM

Wonderfully descriptive!!!

I liked this lots~

Only you Martie~

Goodknight
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Ohio, USA

4 posted 2003-08-15 02:04 PM

those living in the valley around LA know and see and feel what you write so well here Martie - Paul

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19

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Oklahoma

5 posted 2003-08-15 02:48 PM

Loved the way you described heat here.I know it well since it's been in the 100's here.Well done.
angelblueyes

icebox
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in the shadows

6 posted 2003-08-15 03:31 PM

You give new meaning to "hot."

Marge Tindal

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7 posted 2003-08-15 04:07 PM

OhSweetSis~
Love the 'cinnabar' ... perfect~
You're beautiful~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

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state of confusion

8 posted 2003-08-15 04:17 PM

Yes! You've captured it, Martie!

Another heat wave coming in a day or two in this hot Cali summer.

I've been looking toward Tahoe this weekend, the ocean's so far away. A lake isn't the same, but it's cool there.

Cor

QjQ
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9 posted 2003-08-15 04:20 PM

martie.. very good penning,,,

i enjoyed reading,,

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