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chillidriver New Member
since 2003-08-03
Posts 7 |
Why did you leave me alone in this night? so much left unanswered. consumed by this fright. what could I've done different? to change what is now. was I the blame of this instance somehow? My love everlasting would have given my all to know what had happened to stop that last fall. god must have a reason he needed you there leaving me lost, confused in dispair. So sorry my darling for leaving so fast kept hearing his calling no longer could pass he's shown me the pathway where my pain could now end I'll always be with you your side I'll defend I'll be all those whispers you hear in the night watching you safely easing your plight to find all the answers your searching to find always beside you easing your mind. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Chillidriver...this poem has all of the aspects of an elderly couple, one having passed on before the other...reminds me of when my mother said that she and Dad had a pact - she would go first, because he was the stronger one...but it didn't work out that way... a very poignant, moving poem. Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Welcome to Passions. This is a very good first post. I look forward to reading more of your work.  Hugs  Ethel....garysgirl [This message has been edited by garysgirl (08-03-2003 11:38 AM).] |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Welcome to Passions! I like how you wrote this and look forward to more from you. Thanks. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
A provocative double-monologue which is almost unavoidable, I imagine... One tiny technicality: perhaps use the contraction "you're" instead of "your" in "your searching to find"...? Welcome to our supportive group. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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chillidriver New Member
since 2003-08-03
Posts 7 |
Thanks all, not my first just been several months don't know and can't get my old password. much appreciate the way newbies are still greeted tho. friends boyfriend died the other day she was caught off guard and this is my interpretation of how she feels. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Why?" I wish I knew, Rich. I really do. You always did feel other people's sadness more intensely than your own. If you need an to talk, lovie, you know where I am--k? Good to see you here on the blue pages again.  (Oh. And laughing, my husband is looking for you--grins and winks) |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Welcome back!--and your friend has a very good one in you. Prayers for strength and acceptance are on the way to God's Ear! Earth Angel |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
good write |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, I'm sorry to hear of your loss if this in fact related to your life and know always that your love will always be in your heart and soul as the sunshine, music, and poetry will all be that of your love! I send healing angel hugs your way, sweet friend, this is a beautifully touching debut! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to rwad more of your heartfelt poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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