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Excess Weight
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Excess Weight |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Just how much is weight of sorrow What are the pounds of deep despair When you feast on self-derision How many calories are there? How heavy is a broken spirit How much do nightmares tip the scales? Leaden is the very knowledge That no one hears your frightened wails. So when heart soars and feet walk lighter It's not so odd that pounds are shed Just evidence of choosing living Instead of being walking dead. |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
I understand this one nice write Rogue |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
May your heart forever soar and your feet walk light!  Profound write! Loves 'n hugs, EA |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
excellent! lovely metaphors! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Boy did you hit the nail on the head there Suthern, right on! Excellent! |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
You hit it right on here.Well done.  angelblueyes |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your words weigh heavy suthern gal. Excellent poem!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I felt like this was for me...and I smiled |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
That is the absolute truth, and so clear now that you've said it. The downers do make you gain -- any downer, anything that depresses or makes you inactive. Love on the other hand is pretty much the opposite of all that -- Yep, and when your new diet book comes out, I'm definitely buyin' a copy! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
please sign me up for the Suthern diet! Rf |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
suthern - may you walk on a bed of feathers... BC |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
so true, Ruth. I love the message. and I've looked at at the scale with my eyes wide shut more than once.  |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
A great write and message. Jason |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Well I don't know if my comment is welcome here, but *sigh* is all I could do. This is so true. So very true!!! I appreciate this write, very much so. Thank you for sharing.  Thank you, SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I have been on the Atkins diet for a week now...and I feel like the walking dead, Suthern. No carbs...no energy. I prefer your diet. Seems your words have put a spring in my step. I love your work! Patricia |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thomas: Thank you so much! *S* EA: Why, thank you! *S* What a wish! *S* eminor_angel: I thank you for liking! *S* Mysteria: Just don't ask me to use a hammer. LOL Thank you so much, sweet lady. *S* angelblueyes: I'm glad... thank you! *S* Blues: But the spirit's now light. *S* Thank you! PS: It's worth the write just to know you smiled. *S* Thank you, lady! *S* Ratleader: You're right... love eases burdens as dramatically as lack of it weighs one down. *S* Thank you, my friend... and don't worry about buying... I'll GIVE you an inscribed copy! *S* Robert: LOL... Why certainly! *S* Thank you! Bill: I like that image veryu much... thank you! *S* serenity: Same way I looked at mirrors, right? *S* Thank you, lady. *S* Jason: Thank you very much! *S* SharaRose: Your comment is very welcome. *S* Thank you! *S* Patricia: You definitely have my sympathy... may you be successful in reaching your goal quickly! *S* It gives me joy to add a spring to your step... thank you very much! *S* |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A truth stated beautifully. Let's walk hand in hand and choose to enjoy life and let the pounds dissolve! Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Margherita: I’d appreciate the companionship. *S* Thank you very much! *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So when heart soars and feet walk lighter It's not so odd that pounds are shed Just evidence of choosing living Instead of being walking dead. ============================== *sigh* the moth is late again...still playing catch up from me trip.... love the way you turned this one around and answered your own questions with wisdom wrapped in your rhymes divine... Your cadence is always light on its feet and the readers lips  well done poetess Ruth-girlie. "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ah lady...this explains much...sighs and tugs at her jeans*...no really I think this is my very favorite of yours, course every one you write lately replaces my last favorite....the metaphor, emotions and imagery are all wonderful...*smiling her best o&o smile* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern I love the way you write.  |
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Jordyn05 Member
since 2003-07-17
Posts 62 |
Suthern, Great poem. It has touched my soul. I'm sure that all teen girls can relate to this poem. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I absolutely NEVER looked at it that way! You're right! Well done. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
~ ~ ~ > Excellent Thoughts < ~ ~ ~  [This message has been edited by QjQ (08-20-2003 03:21 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
How very true suthern. Love this one...great write! ~Hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
JM: I hope you had a great trip... welcome back! *S* Thank you so much! *S* jellybeans: I do love your *cough* objectivity. LOL Thank you very much, my friend... it means much to me that you like. *S* Seymour: You are a dear... Thank you very much! *S* Jordyn05: And your response touches me. *S* Thank you... and welcome! *S* Pilgrimage: Thank you very much! *S* QjQ: Thank you, kind sir! *S* Enchantress: I'm so glad you like... thank you! *S* |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I love this, Ruth. It's so true, too.  Hugs  Ethel |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
it's about the weight of the world... good job Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 what a wonderful diet formula! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, ladies... so very much! *S* |
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