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0 posted 2003-08-03 08:18 AM



Two Triolets



I imagine stardust falling on me
As I walk in the early morning gray
An awakening that fills me with glee
I imagine stardust falling on me
As light peeks out from waving leaves on trees
A voice begins to rise in praise of day
I imagine stardust falling on me
As I walk in the early morning gray

~*~

Sultry summer sun withers me away
Soon swirling snow will leave layers of white
While I prevail, wanting both worlds to stay
Sultry summer sun withers me away
I melt in a tea and lemonade day
Knowing days will flow into longer nights
Sultry summer sun withers me away
Soon swirling snow will leave layers of white





© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-08-03 08:24 AM


YAY! Oh Karilea, these are stunning!

keeping them

Maree  


fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (08-03-2003 08:25 AM).]

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2 posted 2003-08-03 08:37 AM


Oh my gosh!  K, unbelievable work here.  Seriously, lady, you are magnificent!  

Perhaps I shall try another triolet tonight.  Had quite an interesting evening last night...in some winding hills with friends...it is so cool what my eyes see since I started writing again.

Ooops, rambling here. But I know you understand.

Love this...and yep, keep 'em coming!

Patricia  

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3 posted 2003-08-03 10:02 AM


So this is how a triolet is written with perfection! Love them! Chris



"The suspense is terrible.
I hope it will last!"
-Gene Wilder as Willy Wonka



    

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4 posted 2003-08-03 10:08 AM


Karilea,
Elegant

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5 posted 2003-08-03 10:27 AM


I sigh in staggered wonder
whilst gazing on your words.
Their richness is our treasure.
I sigh in staggered wonder.
How effortlessly they flow
as ripples in life's stream.
I sigh in staggered wonder
whilst gazing on your words.

Marvelous.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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6 posted 2003-08-03 10:38 AM


Oh, Karilea, these are beautiful. You know I was finger tapping when I read the second time. LOL  Oh, and I'm keeping these to study because they are so beautiful and because they are yours.  
Hugs, my friend  
Ethel

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7 posted 2003-08-03 10:44 AM


...There! I just saved these to my file on fine examples of poetic formats! Lovely!

Loves 'n hugs,
Linda

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8 posted 2003-08-26 04:00 AM



These are beautiful, Karilea.  
Glad I stumbled across them tonight.

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

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9 posted 2003-08-26 05:44 PM


Karilea . . .
you are one amazing Lady
these are beautiful!
Perfect!
(don't remind me of the second one lol)
xxoo

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10 posted 2003-08-26 05:55 PM


       Fabulous!

Hugs, Marti

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11 posted 2003-08-26 07:13 PM


Karilea, you do these very well. This is beautiful. Both, the picture and the poem.
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12 posted 2003-08-26 07:37 PM


Lyrical and full of style and wonder.
You always amaze.
Eric

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13 posted 2003-08-26 08:50 PM


Karilea...I love this form...it looks good on you!  
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