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Puppet's Plea
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Puppet's Plea |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Puppet’s Plea lift me my wires are broken I am the puppet who failed denied a wish a life who never knew the promise did not apply to me I believed believed cut my cords and fell reduced sprawled to sticks all slack and lacking life nonexistent gift ungiven oh I do still believe I promise to believe but please oh please just lift me string me paint my smile again give back the semblance let me be a puppet again even that a mercy to this [This message has been edited by Ratleader (08-13-2003 10:58 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sad...yeah...sigh |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I can't pick my favorite part of this heartwrenching plea... for every line fits perfectly into a whole that bleeds anguish and weeps yearning... oh I do still believe I do know that this "got to me" most... the kernel of belief that's buried within us in spite of all dreams dying... in spite of being willing to "settle" just to have anything at all. Absolutely excellent write! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Thank you, Shadows...that's it exactly. Yep, Suthern lass, I pretty much down in the dumps last night....guess it showed, eh? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
A great write, how I also often wish to be led without thought. Jason |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A tad.... yes. *G* |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hey Leader of the Rats...  I like the way you repeated part of the lines in here. It was different, and I like different. I think I'll keep it.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed You are no puppet! Puppets cannot hurt like this. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I hear your pleas and hurt in this.Well penned my friend. angelblueyes |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Such is the curse of dependence and validation... Strong visuals and analogies. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 makes no difference who you are-- anything your heart desires will come to you..." --Jiminy Crickett  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yep, to be merely a puppet once again... Nice to read you dude. Ed |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Mr. Ed.... Not the horse... the Rat leader. Yeah, I heard about this job out in California. Between "whatcha talkin' 'bout, and Conan I think you have an excellant chance. Why not a poet..? lucky |
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