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Refractions of Season ( She Cries )
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
At sunset, The moiré surface Reflected sun dreams On ripples spread While I sat Knowing Words could never Be unsaid Sometimes The view from here Paints Monet on mind While others Picasso angles the Side of me that lies blind Un-whisper Those undercurrents You felt lies While I drift On mirrored Early autumn sky Come winter The lake will freeze Where then Will the pages turn? |
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Poe_Pot_Pie Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 107Canada |
nice metaphors. keep it up!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
... where then will the pages turn? ... amid the gray of flanneled sky as purple twilight rims the edge before the snow peeks over ledge in my chambers, attic high... here is where pages are turned awaiting, again, autumn's burn... ~*~ Now stay around for a little longer, will ya? |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Sometimes The view from here Paints Monet on mind While others Picasso angles the Side of me that lies blind" ~ Artistically expressed!   EA |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
a whisper of regret screams from beneath the canvas of your poetry...you are a true artist! Rf [This message has been edited by Robert Frazier (08-12-2003 04:17 PM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sometimes The view from here Paints Monet on mind While others Picasso angles the Side of me that lies blind Oh my this is really very beautiful. It's always a pleasure to read you Cpat  Maree fate is not just |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
While I sat Knowing Words could never Be unsaid Your words should never remain unsaid! Now you see, you haven't been around too much lately...so, my children forgot the meaning of "I am reading CPAT." When all is quiet tonight, I will come back to you. Just perfect, Ron. See you later, Patricia |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Beautiful write.. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
The metaphors in this are enjoyed.You shine with the artistry of your write angelblueyes |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thanks everyone..for the comments and taking time to read my scribbles... as Southern has said in comments..the WurkMonster... is indeed devouring my time and energies of late and I am so absent from commenting I feel guilty posting anything. So... thank you all for the generous replies and comments when I am so unable to return the favor... Now...lol.. it is back into the jaws of the Wurkbeast for me... it seems everyday of late has added to the demands and I fear my dropping in is going to continue to be quite limited for some time... ah well... keeps me off the streets... lol |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Un-whisper Those undercurrents You felt lies While I drift On mirrored Early autumn sky Come winter The lake will freeze Where then Will the pages turn?" Ya know the saying, "Leave 'em wanting more"? You always do...  What ya say we both quit the day jobs, go have a beer and be slackers awhile? |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Ron -- this one's true to your style with an added subtle and imbedded rhyming scheme which flavors the write ever so well. Perpetually admiring your artistry... -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Damn nice to see you writing again |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 I think I'm just gonna curl up in THIS thread for awhile... Miss you. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Great write Ron... There was a tone to this piece that reminded me of twilight...calm soul searching. Nice. TD |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
While I sat Knowing Words could never Be unsaid I love the contemplation here... both within the poem... and what it inspires in the reader. *S* Don't ever feel guilty about posting, Cap'n... else I'll start nagging YOU! LOL Good luck finding breathing time... you are missed! *S* |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ron, you leave much to the imagination here The view from here Paints Monet on mind While others Picasso angles the Side of me that lies blind the side that lies blind . . . brilliant xxoo |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ron, Read this one last night and didn't get a chance to respond.. "Sometimes The view from here Paints Monet on mind While others Picasso angles the Side of me that lies blind" "Un-whisper Those undercurrents You felt lies While I drift" I loved those lines...Monet; soothing, almost surreal. Picasso; abstract, yet still holds beauty in the unsure. Un-whisper..hmmm..I loved the entire piece. Susan |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Sometimes The view from here Paints Monet on mind Cpat, you bring color to life, and paint it bold! So nicely~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...it's always a pleasure to read your poetry...so nix the guilt stuff about replies, okay? Post those poems! |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I am in complete AWE of this, what an amazing talent you really have, you painted your canvas with very vivid images and emotion....hugssss you I keep this one! Lauren~ The way you move me |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Capt. Ron, you have painted a very beautiful picture for us here. I really enjoyed reading this and I'm going to keep it. I hope you don't mind.  Hugs Ethel |
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