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Open Poetry #28

The Crest Comes Tomarrow

B3jamboree
Junior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 33
Michigan

0 posted 2003-08-10 08:24 PM

Such a storm last night
Tree limbs broke like hearts
Black clouds loomed
Lightning smashed them apart

I lay in my bed
Rain pounding violence
Just waiting
For that inner silence

We have all been tricked
It's not rainy season
Ask the clouds
If they had a reason

You head for the hills
Flood comes tomarrow
Quit your job
And beg, steal or borrow

Grab what's worth grabbing
The rain sure won't wait
Sell your soul
At least you'll know
That you have sealed your fate

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

1 posted 2003-08-10 08:28 PM

Well B3jamboree I enjoyed this. I liked how you said that tree limbs broke like hearts. That was my fav. part, Next time the rain comes in I will be off selling my soul to seal my fate

-ash

I wear my crown of thorns
on my liar's chair
full of broken thoughts
I cannot repair

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2003-08-10 09:51 PM

Great Metaphors...
The meter was just right to match the storms sensations...well done. TD

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