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A walk too long
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A walk too long |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia 
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I walked with you into the night naked I was as I proclaimed romance you must not have heard me for you only laughed maybe it was a passing thought not wanting to know changed the subject to coming storm I walked with you when you cried of love and loss for some reason mine the only available shoulder or the neon sign affixed to my forehead I walked with you when you fell sick old and frail whispering of failing health I helped you to your door and said good night Never once did you comment of my loyalty insane devotion for it had become demanded remembering the time I felt sick and couldn’t help you so you showered guilt on me for hours I walked to where they rested your head marble stone cold ground I cried but strangely not for you realizing that with your passing my life was my own again [This message has been edited by Brad Majors (08-10-2003 08:44 AM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
good penning,,, |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
"Never once did you comment of my loyalty insane devotion for it had become demanded" all too often friend all too often next time, get a bike! what Qj said |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Dan, You almost always leave me wanting to know more... I loved this. Susan |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Brad - I know of your write, thanks for sharing this... BC |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Brad, sometimes parents are so afraid of being alone, they mentally choke their children. It does not excuse their behavior, but understanding can help us cope. At least that's how I deal with it on my end. This poem was a bit difficult to read because it did hit kind of close to home. I'm glad that you have been granted your freedom. You deserve it. Good Poem. ~Tier |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Brad, this really touched my heart. Sometimes people can be so demanding of the time of others. Hugs to you  Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
the good men never get appreciated, do they? your love was deep |
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bbent Senior Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 521Alaska |
literally or conceptualy it caused me both thought and emotion...enjoyed. Live like it's your last day... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Darn! I thought you were talking about a dog. Very heartfelt and a little too real. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Thank you |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ummm...excuse me?? thank you?? thats it? Dan, please tell me who it is about??? Susan |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This touched my heart.remember that all parents aren't perfect and most love you in their own way but don't know how to show it.well done here.  angelblueyes |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Brad, this is a sad, but powerful piece. Whoever this was, NOW she or he knows what you have done. To care and to share love generously is always right, whether there is an earthly reward or not. We must not expect anything in return, even though sometimes this may hurt. Maybe the connection with this person now will continue on higher levels and soothe your heart. As much as life can be demanding at times, our hearts can feel free ... Love, Margherita |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Its sort of a montage of people I've known and my own experience. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Dan, Ohhh that makes it even better...hmmm interesting isn't it? Maybe in the end we do get what we deserve just not always from the people who should be giving it. Karma? Hugs, Susan |
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