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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
“In Conversation at a Noisy Tavern with a Carmel Skin American Princess of Partial African Descent while I drink Wine and She Drinks Mist on the Rocks” Simply spoken back She tosses words uncaring Her eyes brown hair black I can’t speak a word No conversation sharing And nothing is heard I remain silent And at her beauty staring My words stay unspent. Gloom I shortened the Actual title to fit properly on the title line |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
She surely read the message in your eyes ... Sharp description of the atmosphere ... I feel I was there watching. Love, Margherita  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Gloom~ I am confused. Nothing heard because it's noisy...get that, but why are words unspoken? (title says "In Conversation") Was he indeed speaking her beauty with his eyes?? Susan |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I like. Sometimes the conversation says more in the silences... nice snapshot, Prof. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
I enjoyed this, Gloom...nicely done. "My friends are my estate." |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sometimes the fewer words said the better, so I will add: EXCELLENT and you'll know I was here! ~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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