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Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

0 posted 2003-09-19 04:28 PM

These are just words
  taken from
   other lips

     I'd tell you my own
      but
       they aren't
        welcome
         here

           I melt
            tears frozen on my skin
             beg you
              to heal the scars

                they won't leave me
               or sew torn flesh

             I could say

            'time I hate you'

           But I am weak
         and my words stillborn

       I'd like to say goodbye
      but
     it's already been said

   in a thousand other songs

  It should have been someone else
but I saw you fist.

It should have been someone else
but I am weak-

                                                    planes without fuel
                                                    planes with
                                                    metal skin

                                                    I tend to
                                                    break
or so I’ve been told

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

[This message has been edited by Wind (09-19-2003 04:29 PM).]

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-09-19 04:32 PM

Ahh, Wind..

You're going to my library, free cake.

Amazing writing here.

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

2 posted 2003-09-19 04:33 PM

I like cake. if it is lemon cake.

I like lemons!!

and thanks meg. yah..

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

3 posted 2003-09-19 04:57 PM

I feel weak today, tired. tired of speaking (to myself)

I'd tell you my own
      but
       they aren't
        welcome
         here

gahhhh feel this.
you're a master of this poetry lark miss wind.

ugh someone gimme a hug.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

4 posted 2003-09-19 04:58 PM

and iwant some cake, but not lemon.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2003-09-19 05:08 PM

Wait a minute. Didn't you say one time that pickles can't talk, but lemons can? I see what you're up to.

Incidentally, a scarred and spangled poem, grasping at straws and clutching for words. In other words, yum.

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

6 posted 2003-09-19 05:31 PM

Gem

...
on second thought

...you don't want lemons?

he heeee
Mikey- what? I just happen to be obsesssed with the yellow. lol

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2003-09-20 02:10 AM

Liz...this is very cool writing, my friend.
Lots of great lines, but I especially liked this...

"But I am weak
and my words stillborn"

That's just too cool...love it!

Hugs,
~Vicky
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

8 posted 2003-09-20 02:17 AM

Well, Miss Liz.....I never know what to expect
when I open one of your poems...(unlike me, of course

).
But, no matter what you've written, I'm always
pleasantly surprised!! Excellent writing, little friend!
I love the slant of the words.

Hugs

Ethel

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

9 posted 2003-09-20 03:16 AM

this is lovely writing bella! Brava!
hmmm, now if anyone is giving away cake can you please send some to Sydney Australia- we love our cake too!!

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

10 posted 2003-09-20 03:34 AM

"but I am weak and my words stillborn..."
I know that feeling.. I really do. I hate that you do too, though you put it all in words that I could never form.
This is so sad, and so beautiful.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

11 posted 2003-09-20 09:57 AM

The words of this...the pictures of things outside and inside too....just took me. I'm so glad I read this poem, because it said part of me so clear that it might have been written for me.

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______________Ratleader______________

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

12 posted 2003-09-20 11:16 AM

Vicky stole my favorite lines!!

Loved it girly.

Susan

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

13 posted 2003-09-20 11:24 AM

I love it Wind. If we are all having cake can someone make mine pie? I am not a cake eater. I'll take any pie as long as it is not apple! The slant to the words Wind was very dramatic. The subject matter quite eye opening. I wish I could write half as well as you.

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

14 posted 2003-09-20 11:52 AM

rockin...and no, you do write from the heart. the format really adds randomness...loved it. i'll keep you.

and even when everything was wrong, and we were mad at the world, it was still beautiful.

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

15 posted 2003-09-20 12:30 PM

thanks to everyone.

I've got a lot of bakeing to do

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

16 posted 2003-09-20 02:02 PM

Wind, my poet friend....Awesome! hugs, Chris

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

17 posted 2003-09-20 02:37 PM

To perk up your spirits I have lemon meringue pie, lemon cake, lemon cookies and some lemonade to wash it all down! There are yellow helium balloons for you to make wishes on and then let go into the wild blue yonder. I'll sing "Yellow Submarine" by the Beetles in my yellow polka-dot bikini. And I shall give you a glorious arrangement of daffodils and daisies.

EA

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

18 posted 2003-09-20 03:19 PM

EA- lol..that would be a sight worth seeing

he he

actualy my favorite flowers are dead sunflowers. heh

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

19 posted 2003-09-20 10:33 PM

testing...is this an archieve?

I suppose i'll find out

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

20 posted 2003-09-20 11:47 PM

fantastic writing Liz but i know that before i even finish reading the title where your name's involved

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (09-20-2003 11:48 PM).]

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